2023年12月大学英语四、六级作文试题评析（一）

四级

Directions： Suppose the university newspaper is inviting submissions from the students for its coming edition on a campus event that has impressed them most. You are now to write an essay for submission. You will have 30 minutes to write the essay. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

这道大学英语四级作文试题假设大学校报邀请学生投稿，内容是给他们留下最深印象的一次校园活动。这道作文题目与2014年12月的大学英语四级作文试题（a campus activity that has benefited you most）异曲同工，都属于记叙文。考生只需从第一人称的视角叙述一下这次校园活动即可。

本文可以写三段。第一段先指出自己一直积极参加校园活动，然后指出给自己留下最深印象的校园活动是上个月举行的一次模拟面试，此为破题。

第二段详细叙述这次校园活动。我们可以先交代举办这次模拟面试的背景：面试是在找工作的过程中最令人生畏的部分，为了帮助大四学生为即将到来的校园招聘季做好准备，学校组织了这次模拟面试。接着叙述这次面试的经过和收获：我为这次面试做了精心的准备，提前十分钟到达，坐在外面等候。轮到我时，我进入面试室坐在面试官的面前，先介绍一下我自己，然后依次回答他们的问题。在面试结束时，面试官点评了我的表现，并就我的衣着、举止和肢体语言提出了一些建议。

第三段先指出这次模拟面试的意义：它不但改进了我的面试技巧，而且还增加了我的自信心。最后希望这次模拟面试能够帮助自己在求职面试中脱颖而出，并在竞争激烈的人才市场上找到理想的工作。下面请看参考范文：

I have always been an active participant in campus activities. As far as I can remember， the campus event that has impressed me most is the mock job interview held last month.

As we know， the interview is the single most daunting part of a job search. To help us seniors get well prepared for the upcoming on-campus recruitment season， our university organized the simulated interview. I prepared carefully for the interview and arrived ten minutes earlier， sitting outside waiting. When it was my turn， I entered the interview room and sat down before the interviewers. After having introduced myself， I answered their questions in turn. At the end of the interview， the interviewers commented on my performance and gave me some useful pointers on my attire， manner and body language.

The mock interview has not only improved my interviewing skills but boosted my confidence as well. I hope the event will help me ace the interview and nail my dream job in the highly competitive job market. （168 words）

语言亮点借鉴：

1. As we know， the interview is the single most daunting part of a job search.众所周知，在找工作的过程中面试是最令人生畏的部分。single唯一的，在这里起加强语气的作用。daunting令人生畏的。

2. I prepared carefully for the interview and arrived ten minutes earlier， sitting outside waiting.我为这次面试做了精心的准备，提前十分钟到达，坐在外面等候。sitting outside是现在分词短语做状语，修饰arrived。waiting是现在分词做状语，修饰sitting。

3. At the end of the interview， the interviewers commented on my performance and gave me some useful pointers on my attire， manner and body language. 在面试结束的时候，面试官点评了我的表现，并就我的衣着、举止和肢体语言提出了一些有用的建议。pointer建议，相当于suggestion或tip。

4. I hope the event will help me ace the interview and nail my dream job in the highly competitive job market. 我希望这次校园活动能够帮助我顺利通过面试，并在竞争激烈的人才市场上找到理想的工作。 ace顺利通过。nail赢得。

六级

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay that begins with the sentence “With their valuable skills and experience， elderly people can continue to make significant contributions to society.” You can make comments， cite examples or use your personal experiences to develop your essay. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words （not including the sentence given）.

这道大学英语六级作文试题属于阐释观点型。这种类型的试题经常给考生一个开头句，这个开头句同时又表达了这篇文章的观点。题目要求考生论述这个观点的正确性。这道题目的观点是老年人能够用他们的宝贵技能和经验继续为社会做重要贡献。

本文可以写三段。第一段先提出论点——老年人能够用他们的宝贵技能和经验继续为社会做重要贡献。然后以媒体上的大量报道为证：老年人通过做义工、照顾家人和为年轻人提供指导等形式帮助社会。

第二段论述为什么老年人能够用他们宝贵的技能和经验继续为社会做出重要贡献。我们可以先指出老年人的技能和经验在多方面让社会受益，接着从三个方面展开论述。首先，许多老年人在退休之后投入时间做社区服务，比如帮助维持交通秩序，或者在流浪者收容所分发食物。为了增加说服力，我们还可以引用官方的统计数字为证：在中国，超过20%的志愿者年龄超过65岁。其次，许多老年人为家里的亲人提供照顾，这对许多家庭具有重要意义。除此之外，老年人有一生的经验，这让他们成为最好的导师。他们能够在年轻人应对人生挑战的时候为他们提供指导。

本文可以用建议法结尾。第三段先总结上文，指出老年人是社会的财富，他们的贡献对社会的正常运转至关重要。最后，我们水到渠成地建议政府采取有效措施，支持老年人为社会做贡献。下面请看参考范文：

With their valuable skills and experience， elderly people can continue to make significant contributions to society. Stories abound in the media about how seniors are helping society by doing voluntary work， being caregivers and providing guidance to the young.

Senior citizens have skills and experience that can benefit society in many ways. After retiring from full-time work， many seniors volunteer their time to do community service， such as assisting in keeping traffic order or serving up food at a homeless shelter. In fact， according to official statistics， 20% of volunteers in China are over the age of 65. Also， elderly people are often caregivers， providing care for their loved ones， which holds great significance for many families. On top of that， seniors have a lifetime of experience， making them the best mentors. They can offer guidance to younger generations as they navigate life’s challenges.

Senior adults are a valuable asset to society. Their contribution is crucial for our society to function properly. Therefore， it is advised that the authorities take effective measures to support seniors in making contributions to society. （180 words）

语言亮点借鉴：

1. Stories abound in the media about how seniors are helping society by doing voluntary work， being caregivers and providing guidance to the young. 媒体上有许多关于老年人帮助社会的报道，他们做义工，照顾别人以及为年轻人提供指导。story新闻报道。abound大量存在，有许多。

2. On top of that， seniors have a lifetime of experience， making them the best mentors. 除此之外，老年人有一生的经验，这让他们成为最好的导师。making them the best mentors是一个现在分词短语做状语，表示结果。

3. They can offer guidance to younger generations as they navigate life’s challenges. 他们能够在年轻人应对人生挑战时为他们提供指导。navigate成功应付。

4. Therefore， it is advised that the authorities take effective measures to support seniors in making contributions to society. 因此，建议政府采取有效措施，支持老年人为社会做贡献。the authorities政府，官方。support sb in doing sth支持某人做某事。

* 上海外国语大学国际新闻硕士，讲师，专注大学英语写作教学十余年。