增加书面表达“亮点”的方法

晁会霞　陈霄云　余洁妮

众所周知，书面表达评分分为五档，处于四、五档的考生，英语水平不低，要想在考试中得高分，要增加语言的“亮点”。在保证准确的前提下，根据书面表达的内容、篇章结构和自己的实际水平，敢于和善于使用高级词汇、语法结构。

依据多年的教学经验，总结出了一些成功的英语书面表达中的增加文章“亮点”的方法，希望能给于想在考试中书面表达得高分的学生一些帮助，现归纳如下。

一.改变句子开头或运用倒装结构

①用状语开头

In the center of our school lies our library，which is between the garden and the teaching building.（高级）

Tired but happy，the girls rode bikes to the school.（高级）

Badly injured as he was，he managed to take down the cars number.（高级）

Only in this way（by using it often）can I improve my English.（高级）

Hardly had he come back when he knew the truth.（高级）

②以不定式短语开头

He came to Beijing to visit his uncle.（一般）

To visit his uncle，he came to Beijing.（高级）

③以同位语开头

一般句式：Shakespeare is a son and he is from a poor family.He had little education.He wrote many plays and poems.People all over the world like his plays and poems.（句式单一，啰嗦）

黄金句式：Shakespeare，a son from a poor family，a man of little education，wrote plays and poems that are read all over the world.

（以同位语开头，用一个较复杂句式，表达层次清晰，句式多变）

二.运用分词结构和独立主格使句子简洁，更有文采。好多考生在写作时不敢或不知如何使用这个最大的“亮点”，其实很简单，方法：一去，二看，三改。一去：去连词;二看：看主语;三改：改分词。如：Because I am an active young person，I like sports and outdoor activities.第一步，去掉连词Because;第二步，看前后两句话的主语，前后主语一致，去掉主语，改用分词，若前后主语不一致，保留主语，改成独立主格;第三步，改用分词，am变成分词being。

Being an active young person，I like sports and outdoor activities.

如下一般句型改为高级句型：

After everything was done，they sat in the yard and chatted with the elderly people.→Everything done，...

Because she realize her mother must be tired after a days work，the girl helps to remove the bag from her shoulder.→Realizing her mother must be tired after a days work，...

He was praised by his teacher in public，the naughty boy determined to study hard.→Praised by his teacher in public，...

三.巧用連接词及承接短语

①利用连接词so…that，not only…but also，too…to 等。

一般句式：He was diligent.He worked day and night.So he had many great inventions.→黄金句式：He was also so diligent that he worked day and night.And this explained why he had so many great inventions.

黄金句式：Dears friends，please actively take part in after-class activities，which will not only make your school life colorful，but also improve your learning.

② 使用恰当的承接短语，使文章过渡自然，流畅连贯，条理清晰。如：

For one thing，bicycles do not have any petrol and they are energy-saving.For another，bicycles are environmentally friendly because they wont give off waste gas.Whats more，riding bicycles is a good way for us to exercise and it is beneficial to our health.

At first，I did most of the duties myself while other students cared little about class activities.As a result，I was tired out and depressed.Then I turned to my teacher and he advised me to cooperate with others.Thus I began to recognize the strength of my classmates and have everyone do their part in class.

四.走出“高级词汇、语法结构”误区

误区之一：“高级词汇”就是生僻词、长单词或一些“大词”。

如：I have found a flat，covering an area of 25 square meters with a bedroom，a bathroom，and a kitchen.（covering在此属大词小用）

修改：I have found a flat for you，25 square meters in size with a bedroom，a bathroom，and a kitchen.（本文恰当使用了高级结构同位语、介词短语，使句子显得简练、清楚。）

误区之二：过多使用所谓的“高级句子结构”

如学生习作：I strongly hope that this plan should be carried out continually not only because it has given us more space to develop our critical thinking and independent ability but also because we really feel much happier than ever before.（本文一个句子用词39个，运用了一个宾语从句，两个状语从句。太冗长）

修改：I strongly hope that this plan should be carried out continually because it has allowed us more space to develop our critical thinking and independent ability.Whats more，we really feel much happier than ever before.

注意使用“高級词汇、语法结构”一要简洁、准确、得体，通俗易懂，二要在自己的能力范围内，三要恰如其分，不是越多越好，要长短句式结合。

总之，英语作为一门语言学科，学生要想提高自己的阅读水平和写作水平，重在平时一点一滴的积累。掌握了提升文章“亮点”的方法后，还要在日常学习中多积累亮点词汇，短语和高级句型，并且多加练习，多模仿特定的句型句式多练习句子翻译，从而写出准确、地道的语言，提升自身的语言表达能力。