Sharing Housework

On a winter Sunday morning， I was about to go out to play basketball when Isaw my Mom wash clothes. Mom lifted up a basin of water with sweat on her face.Mom looked very tired. So I decided to share some housework with her. I put thebasketball on the ground， sat down and start于to wash clothes. The water was socold and my hands turned red with the cold. And I never stopped. About half anhour later， I finished my housework. When Mom found all the work was done well，she said，“How a good boy you are！ ”

I was so proud that I could share housework with Mom.

河北省阜城縣第四中学皮浩青

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张超男，河北省衡水市阜城县第四中学高级英语教师、县骨干教师、市优秀英语教师，从事英语教育教学工作30 多年；多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章数百篇，并有多篇文章获奖；曾参与多本教辅资料的编写工作；曾荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号；曾多次辅导多名学生在市、省和国家级英语竞赛中获奖。

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本文构思巧妙，语言朴实流畅，感情真挚细腻。

需要修改的地方：

①wash 改为washing。see sb. doing sth.意为“看到某人正在做某事”。

②start 改为started。started 和sat，put 是并列谓语，时态应保持一致。

③And 改为But。上下文是转折关系。

④How 改为What。当what 和how 引导感叹句时，what 修饰名词，而how修饰形容词或副词。

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按中考英语作文满分20 分的评分标准，本文修改前可得18 分。