话题作文——旅游与交通①

福建 林飞军

□语题入门

介绍旅游常识、旅游路线、旅游经历、活动内容,描述人文景观,认识公共标识,选择交通工具,谈论旅游的心情或感受等。

此类话题的作文体裁多为记叙文、说明文,有时也用于应用文等。

★佳作赏评

Welcome to Liu Gong Island

The summer vacation is coming.Where would you like to visit？ Haven't you decided？ Come to Liu Gong Island!

Liu Gong Island is in the east of Weihai,which has an area of 3.15 km2.It is 4.08 km long,1.5 km wide.It will take you 20 minutes to get to the island from the travel port by ship.The history museum on the island is educational.The zoo is interesting to visit.And it is more interesting to travel around the island either on land or by boat.There are all kinds of trees and grass everywhere.It's very easy to travel to Weihai.You can come by bus,by train,or by plane.You can spend a day happily on the island.It is a good place to visit.Visitors from all over the world come to visit it every year.

Wish you a good trip.

【权威点评】这是一篇介绍旅游景点(刘公岛)的记叙文。作者分别以对刘公岛的引入、刘公岛的介绍和自己的希望这三个自然段完成全文。

全文结构完整,层次清晰,详略得当,描写细腻。阅读短文,会使读者对刘公岛留下一种难以忘怀的印象。

文章中巧妙地运用了and,everywhere,either...or...等单词和“Haven't you decided？ ”等句子,从而为习作增添了一定的色彩。

美中不足的是复合句子“Liu Gong Island is in the east of Weihai,which has an area of 3.15 km2.”的运用有些偏难,如果将其改为两个简单句子,将会更加简单、易懂。

★思路点拨

该话题多采用“A visit to...”和“Welcome to...”等作为短文的标题(有时也可不用标题),并主要围绕“总述引入——节描写——概括点题”三个方面进行构思成文。

景点介绍类的作文多采用一般现在时态,并使用第一人称或第二人称。谈论旅游经历方面的作文经常以一般过去时态来呈现,人称以第一人称或第二人称为主,适当使用第三人称。

【高频词语】

arrive到达,bike自行车,bus公共汽车,cold冷的,cool凉爽的,hot热的,cost花费,enjoy享受,happy高兴的,holiday假日,journey旅行,like喜欢,map地图,place地方,plane飞机,train火车,play玩,reach到达,route路线,spend度过,spring春天,summer夏天,take乘坐,tour旅行,travel旅行,trip旅游,vacation假日,visit游览,interesting有趣的,wish祝愿,hope希望,bike ride骑自行车,have fun/have a good time/enjoy oneself玩得开心,take a photo拍照,get to到达,in the city在城市,in the countryside在乡村,a visit to...去……的旅行,take a bus乘坐公交车,by train坐火车,in the south of在……的南部,travel to去某处旅行

【典型句型】

1.We will go to...我们将要去……

2.He likes(visiting)...他喜欢(游览)……

3.What about going to...？ 去……怎么样？

4.He will take a bus/train/plane to...他将乘坐公交(火车 /飞机)去……

5.We can go there by...我们可以乘坐……去那里。

6.The summer vacation is coming.暑假就要到了。

7.Have you ever been to...？ 你去过……吗？

8.It's a...place to...它是一个……的地方。

★题例解析

你在假期里喜欢外出旅游吗？假如你在五天的假期里去了柏林,请根据下面所给的提示内容,以“A visit to Berlin”为题写一篇英语短文,叙述你本次柏林之行的所见所闻,并谈谈自己的感受。

要点提示：

1.花费了五天时间去柏林度假；

2.柏林是一个很大的城市；

3.步行或骑自行车外出游玩,并且品尝了那里的美食。

具体要求：

1.短文应覆盖所有要点,也可适当增加某些细节,使行文连贯；

2.词数在80以上。

A visit to Berlin

【写作提示】从所给的题目(A visit to Berlin)就可以看出,这是一篇记述柏林之行的游记文章。全文应该通过几个具体的小片段,展现所参观之处的人文环境。

一、结构安排

短文可以分为五个自然段。第一自然段直接点明本次参观游玩的主题,即主要人物 (I)、所去的地点(Berlin)、所用时间 (five days)和旅游路线(travel from one area to aother area)等情况。第二、三自然段介绍出行旅游的方式(骑行或步行)。具体说明骑行需租车的费用(around 9 Euros per day)和骑行的好处(fast and easy)等。步行更为自由,还可以更多地了解到城市的历史等。第四自然段记录“我”所做的一件重要的事情——品尝美食。通过对street food,restaurants等地方的考察,感觉这里的食物比较便宜。第五自然段可以写出“我”对这次柏林之行的感受,从而抒发感情,结束全文。

二、词语运用

从整个题目要求来看,可以首先使用句子“Have you ever been to Berlin？”巧妙地设置悬念,以激起读者的阅读欲望。为了体现语言表达的规范性,建议使用“If you really want to enjoy walking,there is also a free walking tour.”或“Though I may not ever live there,I'd happily go back and visit—over and over again.”之类的句子。句与句、段与段之间适当使用and then,for me,after this visit等过渡性词语,以使各结构之间的衔接更加恰到好处。

三、时态使用

本篇短文要以一般现在时态为主,适当使用一般过去时态和现在完成时态。

【参考范文】

A visit to Berlin

Have you ever been to Berlin？ I paid a visit to it for five days and enjoyed a happy time.Berlin is a big city.In order to make my travel easy,I divided the city into some areas,and then traveled from area to area.

It is a great place for a bike ride instead of walking around.It provides a fast and easy way to move around Berlin,and costs around 9 Euros per day to rent.

If you really want to enjoy walking,there is also a free walking tour.It begins at the Brandenburg Gate and lasts 3.5 hours.It took me through the center of the city,showed me all the highlights and gave me some history about the city.

For me,one of the most important things is to enjoy the local delicious food.We can judge (推断)a city on how cheap it is by the food,and the food in Berlin is very cheap.And not just street food,even the restaurants there are a bargain.You can find a lot of meals for less than 5 Euros.Here is a truth for you—the lemons and the fresh vegetables are mouth watering.

After this visit,I enjoy Berlin more.Though I may not ever live there,I'd happily go back and visit—over and over again.

★尝试练笔

参观、旅游是每个人都十分期待的事情,每次外出游玩都会留下难以忘却的记忆。假如你在暑假里随父母去北京参观了长城,请以“A visit to the Great Wall”为题写一篇100词左右的英语短文,记录你们爬长城过程中的所见所闻,并谈谈你对这次出行的感受。

具体要求：

1.体现上述题目要求的具体内容,细节问题可适当发挥；

2.短文要求层次清晰,详略得当,用词准确。

A visit to the Great Wall

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