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2016-05-14龚思竹
龚思竹
试题展示 假如你是李华,最近你在澳大利亚布里斯班的home stay打算来中国旅游并来看望你,来之前有些问题要咨询你,请根据下面home stay的电子邮件用英语回一封电子邮件。
Hi Li Hua,
Hope you and your family are well. We have booked a tour to see the sights of China in March. In the travel we plan to fly to Wuhan to see you.How does that sound? Because we are going to stay in your city for two days, so can you keep us informed of your arrangements about our stay and how can we get to your family from the airport? By the way, which hotel we had better reserve in your city?
Waiting for your reply!
Steven and Karen
注意:1. 词数100字左右;
2. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3. 写作内容不要透露你所在城市的任何信息,推荐酒店为White Swan Hotel;
4. 开头结尾一给出,不计入总词数。
Hi Steven and Karen,
Im more than thrilled to know that you are going to be with us for two days and
Looking forward to your coming!
Yours,
Li Hua
审题谋篇
任何题型,审题是关键,审题精准就把握住了方向,才有得高分的可能。就本题要求而言,同学们要读懂并提炼出要点略有难度。总结其要点如下:
体裁:应用文;回复email。
要点:1. Keep them informed of the arrangements in Wuhan.
2. How to get to Lihuas house from the airport?
3. Which hotel should they reserve?
时态:一般现在时,一般将来时。
人称:第一人称,第二人称。
我们来看看两篇习作:
习作1
Hi, Steven and Karen,
I am more than thrilled to know that you are going to be with us for two days and its my turn to entertain you as a host. Here Id like to inform you of arrangements about your stay.
First of all, dont worry about how to get to my family, I will show up at the airport when your flight lands at Tianhe International Airport. Afterwards, we will take a taxi to the Swan Hotel that I have reserved for you. It is a fabulous hotel that you can relax yourselves. The following day I will show you around Big Wuhan, there are many attractions at I firmly believe you will have a good time, such as yellow Crane tower and East Lake. Furthermore, I will to you take you to some exotic snacks.
Thats all about the arrangements. Do you have any extra opinions? Looking forward to your coming!
习作2
Hi, Steven and Karen,
I am more than thrilled to know that you are going to be with us for two days and it is my privilege to inform you of some concrete arrangements about your stay here.
Thinking of the fact that you have provided me with warm reception and superb treatment in Australia, I will definitely make your stay here as pleasant as possible. On the first day, I will show you around the city, visiting the galleries, museums and other places of interests. To be honest, it is a fabulous chance to have more acquaintance with Chinese culture. The following day, we intend you to climb the mountain with us. Not only can you feast your eyes on the breathtaking scenery, but also you will get relaxed and refreshed. Above all, I strongly recommend White Swan Hotel to you in my city, which offers gorgeous services and convenience in the meanwhile. As for how to get to my neighborhood, I will pick you up at the airport in person and then drive you home to meet my family.
Looking forward to your coming.
Yours,
Li Hua
点评
习作1 这篇习作结构清晰,层次分明,基本囊括了题目中的所有要点。文章突出了两天的安排,阐述得井井有条。从语言使用上看,有些许形容词、副词(fabulous,firmly,exotic)用得比较恰当,意群间也使用了过渡词(first of all,afterwards,furthermore)。但整体来看句式单一,没有灵活运用短语、固定句型等。这样的文章不会激起评卷者给高分的欲望。笔者以为四挡中的19分比较合适。
习作2 结构清楚,层次分明,逻辑紧密,完全完成了题目要求。同样重点介绍了两天的具体活动安排,但较之习作1,在语言方面,习作2明显优胜一筹。大量使用形容词副词增强了语言感染力(concrete,superb,fabulous,breathtaking,gorgeous,definitely,strongly)。适当使用句型(thinking of the fact that ...;it is my privilege to ...;not only ...,but also ...)、短语和词组(have more acquaintance with,feast your eyes on,intend you to,in the meanwhile,in person ...)。笔者认为打22分合适。遗憾的是本文在高级句式使用上稍有欠缺。
范文赏析
Hi, Steven and Karen,
I am more than thrilled to know that you are going to be with us for two days and I feel privileged and obliged to plan a fantastic trip for you in appreciation of your hospitality during my stay in Australia. Hoping the concrete arrangements as follows will be of great help.
Upon your arrival in our city, I will pick you up at the airport in person; thus you neednt bother to concern about means of transportations. As for your accommodation, Id like to recommend White Swan Hotel, definitely the best one in our city distinguished for its considerable service and cozy atmosphere with a relatively reasonable price. Most importantly, during the two days, I will show you around to explore our city. On the first day, I advise going sightseeing together to some famous scenic spots, including typical Huanghelou and East Lake. Im sure that our city, a mixture of classical architecture and modern atmosphere is a feast for eyes, bringing you visual delights as well as much acquaintance with its culture. Then on the second day, what about tasting some local foods special to our city together?
Looking forward to your coming!
Yours,
Li Hua