我的梦

刘秀娟

[真题再现]

每个人都有属于自己的梦，每个梦都不一样，而且梦有大有小，梦有很多种，中国梦，教育梦，学校发展梦，个人人生梦。你的梦是什么呢？ 请你围绕“My dream”这一话题给我们说说做为21世纪中国青少年你的梦是什么？

要求：结构严谨，内容完整，语言丰富优美，语法准确，可读性强。至少80词。

[学生佳作]

MY DREAM

张卓然

Everybody has a dream. Some want to be a doctor, some want to be a teacher, but my dream is to be a tour guide.

Why do I want to be a tour guide? First I am a outgoing and lovely girl. I like travelling all over the world. I like our own countrys culture and other countries culture. From my job, I will learn more and make me get more confident. Second I like making friends from different places. Friends bring me happiness and help. Perhaps, my foreign friends will ask me to visit their countries. I will know more about their culture. Whats more, I like singing .I am good at languages. These are suitable for my job.

Now, I am still a middle school student. I will study harder. I will go a good university to learn how to be a excellent tour guide. I am sure my dream will come true.

[教师点评]

一、这篇小文章结构清晰合理、观点明确，完全符合题目要求。

二、段落的划分合理，层次感强。第一段用了一个过渡句，开门见山提出作者自己的梦。第二自然段叙述成为旅游向导的原因。第三段阐述了实现梦的努力方向。

三、语言丰富、表达方式多样、叙述简洁、逻辑紧密。特别是关联词：first…, second…,whats more使行文更加流畅。

（作者单位：黑龙江省逊克农场学校）

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