A Sick Note

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Dear Mr.Xu,

I am writing to you to ask for a sick leave.

Last Saturday I went to visit my dear aunt and I was caught in the rain on the way to home①.That night I had a headache.My father took my temperature and found I had got a high fever.He took me to see a doctor the next day.The doctor said I had a bad cold and asked me to stay in bed two days②.So I can’t come to school today and I can’t take part in the football match to be held on Tuesday,too③.I will be very thankful to you that④you give me a kind understanding.

Your student,

Li Yanyan

河北省阜城县古城中学九年级（2）班 李岩岩

1.优点：

本文是一张病假条，属于应用文体裁。本文写作格式正确，语言流畅，条理清晰，语句通顺。在正文中小作者把请假的原因及时间描述得十分清楚。

2.需要修改的地方：

①to home应改为home。home在此处是副词，其前面无需加介词to。

② two days应改为for two days。时间段前面通常要用介词for。

③too应改为either。too一般用于肯定句，而either一般用于否定句。

④that应改为if。分析句意可知这里应是一个由if引导的条件状语从句。

3.评分：

按照中考英语作文满分20分的标准，本文修改前可得17分。