Learn from Chen Binqiang
2013-08-15浙江省青田县温溪镇第一中学九年级12班郑培森
浙江省青田县温溪镇第一中学九年级12班 郑培森
Chen Binqiang lives in Pan’an County in South China’s Zhejiang Province.His father died in a traffic accident when he was only eight years old.His mother raised the three children all alone.Six years ago,his mother gotAlzheimer(老年痴呆症).As a middle school teacher,he fastens the two of them together while riding his motorbike to go to work.He takes good care of his mother.He is very great.I think everyone should learn from him and respect our parents.On Mother Day’s Eve,let’s do something meaningful for our parents.Let’s do the housework,do some washing and cleaning and so on.Would you like to tell your mother that you love her very much?Or would you like to give her a greeting card?This is a very good way to show our love to her.
总评
陈斌强作为2012年感动中国的十大人物之一,孝敬母亲,本文就叙述了他的事迹。描写他的经历时,时态运用得当,一般现在时和一般过去时转换得很好。然后用I think...作为过渡句,引出去尊敬母亲,为母亲做事情。全文条理清楚,一气呵成,层次分明,长短句运用得当,是一篇优秀的学生习作。