2023年6月大学英语四、六级作文试题评析（二）

贾从永

四级

Directions： Suppose the student union of your university is organizing an online discussion on college students doing community service.You are to write an essay on its benefits and the service you can provide to the community. You will have 30 minutes for the task. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

這道大学英语四级作文试题属于分析现象型。此类型题目的特点是提出一个社会现象或问题，要求考生对其加以分析。本题要求考生分析大学生做社区服务工作的益处并指出自己能为社区提供的服务。由于一篇四级作文只能有一个重心，所以我们最好把大学生做社区服务工作的益处（即大学生为什么要做社区服务工作）作为本文论述的重点。至于自己能为社区提供何种服务，我们在结尾段中简略提及即可。

这篇作文可以写三个段落。

第一段提出本文要分析的社会现象。我们可以先指出，如今越来越多的大学生寻找机会做社区服务工作。然后，引用上海大学的一项研究来证实这一点——该校84.2%的受访学生平均每周做1.5小时的社区服务工作。

第二段分析大学生做社区服务工作的益处。我们不妨从三个方面展开，注意三个方面之间互不重叠。首先，做社区服务工作有助于大学生结交新朋友，磨练社交能力，因为他们必须和来自不同背景的人打交道。其次，参加社区服务让大学生有机会培养与工作相关的技能，如团队合作、批判性思维和时间管理。在未来的职场上，这些技能对他们很有用。最后，做社区服务工作还有助于培养大学生的美德，如无私、慷慨和善良等，这些都是成为对社会有用之人的重要品质。

本文的结尾段可以先重述主题——做社区服务工作不但让世界变得更美好，还对大学生大有裨益。然后，指出自己能为社区提供的服务——到本地福利院帮忙，因为我认为应当把爱给与那些最需要爱的人。

下面请看参考范文：

Nowadays college students are seeking out opportunities to perform community service in increasing numbers. According to a recent Shanghai University survey， 84.2% of its students polled average 1.5 hours of community service a week.

Doing community service helps college students make new contacts and hones their social skills， as they have to interact with people from a wide variety of backgrounds. Also， participating in community service is an opportunity for college students to develop work-related skills， such as teamwork， critical thinking and time management， which will stand them in good stead in the workplace in the future. Most importantly， volunteering helps cultivate such virtues as selflessness， generosity and kindness in college students， all essential qualities for becoming a contributing member of society.

Doing voluntary work not only makes the world a better place， but also benefits college students tremendously. As for me， I would like to help out at a local home for handicapped children， because I believe love should be given to those who most need it. （168 words）

语言亮点借鉴：

1. Nowadays college students are seeking out opportunities to perform community service in increasing numbers. 如今越来越多的大学生寻找机会做社区服务工作。

2. According to a recent Shanghai University survey， 84.2% of its students polled average 1.5 hours of community service a week. 根据上海大学最近所做的一项调查，该校84.2%的受访学生平均每星期做1.5小时的社区服务工作。polled做定语，一般放在所修饰的名词或代词之后。

3. Also， participating in community service is an opportunity for college students to develop work-related skills， such as teamwork， critical thinking and time management， which will stand them in good stead in the workplace in the future. 而且，做社区服务工作对大学生来说是一个培养工作相关技能的机会，如团队合作、批判性思维和时间管理。这些技能会让他们在未来的职场上受益。 stand sb in good stead让某人受益。

4. Doing voluntary work not only makes the world a better place， but also benefits college students tremendously. 做志愿工作不但让世界变得更加美好，而且能让大学生受益匪浅。

六级

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay that begins with the sentence “When faced with different opinions， we should try to reach agreement through friendly discussion and reasonable argument.” You can make comments， cite examples or use your personal experiences to develop your essay. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

这道大学英语六级作文试题属于阐释观点型。此类型题目的特点是提出一个观点，要求考生论证这个观点的正确性。这道题目中的观点是：面对不同意见，我们应当设法通过友好讨论和理性争论来达成一致。我们审题时要善于透过复杂的表述看到题目的本质。这道题的本质是要求考生论证友好讨论和理性争论的重要性。

这篇作文可以写三段。

第一段先提出观点——面对不同意见，我们应当设法通过友好讨论和理性争论来达成一致。然后，引用在上海所做的一项研究为证——84.2%的受访白领把就一个问题展开讨论看作达成共识的机遇。

第二段论证友好讨论和理性争论的重要性。我们先指出友好讨论和理性争论是达成共识的有效策略，尤其是在背景和经历迥然不同的人之间。接着，我们以职场为例来论证这个观点。在职场上，人们公开讨论或争论，有礼貌地分享思路和设想，因此可以听到各种声音，从而增进彼此之间的相互理解。显然，这有助于达成共识。为了使论证更有说服力，我们再从反面进行论证。在压制讨论和争论的环境里，人们会因为害怕上级的训斥而避免说出自己的真实想法。这不可避免地会导致士气低落和气氛紧张。

本文可以用建议法结尾。第三段先指出友好讨论和理性争论对于职场各方面的顺利运作都至关重要，然后建议大家学习磋商技巧，比如清晰表达和积极倾听的能力，以便使讨论和争论更加有效和友好。下面请看参考范文：

When faced with different opinions， we should try to reach agreement through friendly discussion and reasonable argument. A recent study conducted in Shanghai found that 84.2 percent of the white-collar workers polled look at locking horns over a problem as an opportunity to reach common ground.

Friendly discussion and reasonable argument are effective strategies for arriving at a consensus， especially among people with diverse backgrounds and experiences. Lets take the workplace as an example. Through discussion and argument， workers share their thoughts and ideas openly and respectfully. This provides an opportunity for all voices to be heard， thus promoting mutual understanding. Obviously， this is conducive to reaching agreement. On the other hand， in environments that discourage discussion and argument， workers will avoid speaking their mind for fear of reprimand from a higher-up. This will inevitably lead to lower morale and heightened tension.

Friendly discussion and reasonable argument are critical for any workplace to run smoothly. Therefore it is advised that we be equipped with good negotiating skills， such as communicating clearly and listening actively， to make discussion and argument more productive and pleasant. （183 words）

语言亮点借鉴：

1. A recent study conducted in Shanghai found that 84.2 percent of the white-collar workers polled look at locking horns over a problem as an opportunity to reach common ground. 最近在上海所做的一项研究发现，84.2%的受访白领把就某个问题进行争论看作达成共识的机遇。look at... as 把……看作。lock horns over... 就……进行争论。reach common ground达成共识。

2. This provides an opportunity for all voices to be heard， thus promoting mutual understanding. 这便提供了一个机会，能听到所有的意见，从而增进了相互理解。voice意见，观点。thus promoting mutual understanding是現在分词短语用作状语，表示结果。

3. Obviously， this is conducive to reaching agreement. 显然，这有利于达成一致。be conducive to 有助于，有利于。

4. Therefore it is advised that we be equipped with good negotiating skills， such as communicating clearly and listening actively， to make discussion and argument more productive and pleasant. 因此，建议大家都具备良好的磋商技巧，如清晰表达和积极倾听的能力，以便使讨论和争论更加富有成效和友好。it is advised that... 这是一个提建议的常用句型，后面的从句用虚拟语气。

* 上海外国语大学国际新闻硕士，讲师，专注大学英语写作教学十余年。