Pleasures and Love

Reading 2

Everyone talks about the advantages of taking time out for“simple pleasures”.

The idea is that we will be happier if we often engage in inexpensive, easy-to-do activities.

However, the problem for many of us is that we don’t know what makes us happy.When I was in college, my mother gave me some wise advice. She said,“Before you get married and live with another person, you need to spend some time living by yourself. You need to get to know yourself.”

So I did exactly that. For almost two years, I lived by myself, I found that I loved spending hours looking around in bookstores. I also enjoyed spending an afternoon just walking around the city.And every so often,I needed moments of pure silence.

But,of course,we all don’t enjoy the same things.

A simple pleasure for me would be to spend an hour reading a book in my backyard.However,that same activity would not give my husband any pleasure.We are all so different.

Sometimes,we already know what makes us happy.However,as life gets busier and we get older,we often put aside our simple pleasures.

For example, I had to give up playing the flute when I started working and had family responsibilities. Playing my flute seemed selfish when no one else in my family could join me.But three years ago,I returned to playing the flute.I regret having ever stopped.

Simple pleasures are neither simple nor common. Our simple pleasures are a reflection of who we are. There are different activities that bring each of us joy.Each of us has to find out what it is that feeds our souls.

That isn’t always easy in a world in which we have to consider other people’s needs and opinions as well as our own. But enjoying simple pleasures is something that each of us deserves.

Think of it as your right, and say to yourself,“Today, I’m going to discover what my simple pleasures are.”

Task

What can we learn from the writer’s experience of playing the flute?

Writing 2

What do you think of love in your daily life?Can you give us some examples about love around you? What are you going to do to show your love to others? Please share your ideas about the topic“love around me”.

原文呈现

In my daily life, I think that no matter where I am, there’s always a lot of love around me. such as love from families,friends,strangers,and so on.

第一段应围绕“What do you think of love in your daily life？”展开，而小作者回答的是“Where does love come from？”，存在偏题情况。

Love is very common, for it can be a hand for helping the elderly,a talk for comforting others, or a decision for being a volunteer.Love is everywhere.

第二段是给出“some examples about love around you”，而小作者给的例子过于抽象，不够具体。在写这类例子时，需要慎重思考是用一般现在时还是一般过去时。

I’m going to show my love by giving my seat to others. I hope love can continue to pass on.

第三段，小作者表示自己将做一些事情来传递爱，时态正确，但过于简单。全文字数偏少。

升格展示

As everybody knows, love makes the world go around. There is plenty of love around me.My parents love me.They take good care of me.My teachers and classmates love me too. They try their best to help me when I’m in trouble. I feel very happy and thankful when I get love from them.

In the last term, my English was poor and I failed my English exam, I was very sad and lost confidence in English. But my English teacher patiently comforted me and encouraged me. She used her spare time to help me with my English. Last week, I got the first place in the English exam. I am very grateful to my English teacher. It is her love that has influenced me and restored my confidence. I’m going to study harder to make her proud and lend a helping hand to my classmates when they need me.

Love is like the sun,it makes me feel warm and happy.Love is not only around me but also around everyone. I believe that our world will become more beautiful and peaceful if everyone loves each other.

综合点评

这是一篇话题作文，以“love around me”展开描写。同学们要注意按照题目中所给要求写作，注意语言的连贯性和合理性。升格后的文章围绕三个问题展开，文章句式灵活，描述脉络清晰，表达自然流畅。此外，小作者的时态运用恰当，文中增加了一些细节描写，更具说服力。