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关注青少年的健康

2021-04-01山东路冬梅

疯狂英语·新读写 2021年3期
关键词:润色词数说明文

山东 路冬梅

青少年的健康问题近期备受关注,科学家也已经给出相关建议,让我们一起到文章中一探究竟。

Teenagers' fitness is now a major concern and physical exercise is very important. It reduces stress and improves fitness. Exercise makes your body strong and helps you to keep the right body weight. Sports scientists offer the following advice to teenagers: First, find out your present level of fitness. Then you can design a programme that will help you become healthier.

There are three levels of fitness that need a change of lifestyle. “Overweight” means that the person gets very little exercise and often has a serious weight problem. “Inactive'' means that the person does not join in many physical activities, but is not seriously overweight. “Active” refers to people who take part in sports and other physical activities, but do not have a high fitness level.

According to experts, overweight teenagers should work out to keep healthy. Ride a bike, play volleyball or basketball for a while, and go for a twenty-minute walk each day. All these will help to burn calories. Inactive teenagers should do similar activities, but add some bending and stretching exercises, such as push-ups and sit-ups, starting with twenty of each a day. Inactive people can take a little more exercise than overweight people because their bodies are stronger. The same rule is also suitable for active teenagers.

Experts also suggest one hour a week or more on running and other forms of intensive exercises,together with fifteen minutes a day spent on stretching and bending activities. They are really important in order to prevent injuries. Some weight-training and other body-strengthening exercises could also be planned in the programme in order to increase people's strength.

Difficult sentence

1.“Overweight” means that the person gets very little exercise and often has a serious weight problem.

译文:“超重”是指这个人很少锻炼,而且往往有严重的体重问题。

分析:该句中that引导的是一个宾语从句。

2. Inactive people can take a little more exercise than overweight people because their bodies are stronger.

译文:不活跃的人可以比超重的人多做一点运动,因为他们的身体更强壮。

分析:该句中because引导的是一个原因状语从句。

阅读上面的短文,根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。

写作导引

一、析结构

本文是一篇说明文,文章分析如下:

二、巧改写

可以采用替换、转换和信息概括等技巧来实现对原文要点的转述。

(1)Teenagers' fitness is now a major concern and physical exercise is very important. It reduces stress and improves fitness. Exercise makes your body strong and helps you to keep the right body weight.

→Physical exercise is beneficial to teenagers' health.

(2)Sports scientists offer the following advice to teenagers: First, find out your present level of fitness. Then you can design a programme that will help you become healthier.

→Teenagers are advised to figure out their fitness level and make a plan to keep fit.

(3)There are three levels of fitness that need a change of lifestyle. “Overweight” means that...“Inactive” means that... “Active” refers to people who...

→There are three levels of physical states, namely “overweight'', “inactive'' and “active'', which urge a change of lifestyle.

(4)According to experts, overweight teenagers should work out to keep healthy... All these will help to burn calories. ...but add some bending and stretching exercises... The same rule is also suitable for active teenagers.

→According to different fitness levels, experts suggest teenagers do calorie-burning exercises like bending and stretching exercises.

(5)Experts also suggest...and other forms of intensive exercises, together with fifteen minutes a day spent on stretching and bending activities. They are really important in order to prevent injuries.Some weight-training and other body-strengthening exercises could also be planned in the programme in order to increase people's strength.

→Besides, intensive exercises and body-strengthening exercises are recommended to avoid injuries and build up one's strength.

三、妙润色

1. 运用适当的连接词润色文章。

表转折:but、however、though、although等。

表并列、递进:as well as、in addition to、not only...but also、besides、what's more、furthermore等。

表对比:meanwhile、on the other hand、on the contrary、by contrast等。

表列举:firstly、secondly、finally等。

表原因:because (of)、due to、on account of、for等。

表举例:for example/instance、such as、and so on等。

总结:therefore、consequently、in short、in conclusion、in a word等。

2. 关注所写概要的词数,词数超过80就要删减一些细节;词数少于45,可添加一些细节。

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