My Community Centre

本期点评名师

陈传光 男，江苏省连云港市罗阳中学高级教师，从事教育工作逾15年。江苏省教育学会会员，连云港市优秀教育园丁，曾荣获英语专业技能大赛市一等奖，班主任基本功大赛市一等奖。有多篇论文在各主流和核心期刊上发表。指导学生在各类竞赛中取得了优异成绩，多人获得省级、地市级奖。

My Community Centre

My name is Zhu Jinxing. I live with my family in a new community. There are many modern buildings in my community. And we have a community centre likes① a big family.

My family members are all volunteers. My father is a computer engineer. He often helps others check and fix their computers. My mother is an English teacher. She always helps students with their homework. At weekends my brother and I often go to see the old people and do some shopping for them. Our neighbours are nice and helpful. They always say“hello” to us. Love House is our favourite place. We go there when we need help with all kinds of problems.

We love our community centre. We think it is luck② for us to have the community centre. 江蘇省连云港市罗阳中学七（5）班 朱金星

1. 优点：

本文作者从自己的家庭成员、邻居、爱心屋三个方面详细介绍了自己的社区中心，小作者笔下的社区中心是个和谐、温暖的地方。在文章结尾处，小作者还表达了对社区中心的爱，升华了文章主题。整篇文章文字流畅，用词得当，是一篇不错的学生习作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①likes改为like。此处like是介词，意为“像”，不应该加s。

②luck改为lucky。be动词后接形容词。

3. 评分：

按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分25分的评分标准，本文修改前可得22分。