My New Friend

曾江涛

张祖平 男，80后英语教师，就职于浙江省绍兴市树人中学，爱好阅读、翻译和写作。在英语教学中，注重分层教学，尤其善于激励英语薄弱的学生，用他们的兴趣爱好，引导他们进行愉快阅读。自主研发的“E飞英语口语考试小程序”荣获2018年绍兴市教师自制教具比赛一等奖。

I have a new friend this term. Hes① name is Mike. His father is from US②， and his mother is from China. So he can speak Chinese and English. He really likes playing basketball. And he wants to join the basketball club. His favorite animal is panda③ because he thinks theyre very cute. His home is about two kilometers away from the school， so he rides his bike to the school. It takes him about ten minutes. Now is 3 p.m. on Thursday afternoon④.

What is Mike doing now？ He is reading in the school library with his classmates. Do you want to be his friend？

点评

1. 优点：

本文紧扣要点，语言简洁，动词词组的使用比较准确，如like doing结构，want to do等结构。一般现在时和现在进行的使用也没有出现错误。此外，小作者还能使用适当的连词，如and，so，because等，使行文更连贯。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①Hes改为His。Hes是He is的缩写，此处要表达他的名字，所以应该用His name。

②the。美国的全称是the United States of America，可以縮写为the USA或者the US，the不要漏掉。

③此处应该改为animals are pandas。这样与后文的代词they保持行文一致。

④此句建议改为：It is Thursday today and it is 3：00 in the afternoon.写这种句子要遵循英语的语言习惯，不要采用中式英语的错误方式来写。

3. 评分：

按中考英语作文满分10分的评分标准，本文修改前可得7分。