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2020-08-24邹红岩

疯狂英语·读写版 2020年8期
关键词:有益词数行文

邹红岩

建议信是针对某事向收信人提出建议或忠告的信件。建议信有可能是写给个人,就遇到的某个问题提出自己的看法和观点;也可能是写给某个组织或机构,就改进其服务提出建议或忠告。建议信通常简明扼要、目的明确、具有合理性和说服力。

建议信通常分为三部分:

1. 首段通常介绍自己并说明目的或交代对方需要建议的主题。

1. 主体部分提出具体建议。

2. 尾段为总结或预测可能的结果,给对方以行动的信心和决心。

模板范文

Dear Peter,

Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well. Here are my suggestions.

To begin with, it is a good idea to make more Chinese friends in your daily life, with whom you can practice your spoken Chinese. Whats more, it also helps to listen to Chinese songs and watch Chinese movies, which can enable you to gain a better understanding of Chinese. Besides, keeping a diary is also a good choice, as it can benefit your writing level.

I hope you will find my suggestions beneficial and make great progress in Chinese.

Yours,

Li Hua

◎经典句型

篇首句:交代对方需要建议的主题

Im writing to you to know what is going on with... 我寫信给你是想了解一下……怎么样了。

However, to you, I highly recommend... 但是对你而言,我强烈推荐……

My suggestions are as follows. 我的建议如下。

If I were you, I would... 如果我是你,我就会……

I have learned that you have some trouble in…and I would like to give/offer you the following suggestions. 我知道你在……方面有困难,因此我想给你提如下一些建议。

Youve asked me for advice with regard to/regarding…and Ill try to make some useful /helpful/practical suggestions here. 关于……你向我征求建议,在此,我尽量提出一些有用的/有帮助的/实用的建议。

When it comes to /As for… the following are my suggestions./My suggestions are as follows.当涉及/关于……,我的建议如下。

Im writing to give you some suggestions/give you a hand. 我写这封信的目的是给你一些建议/帮助。

Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how… 我非常高兴收到你的来信,在信中,关于如何……你向我征求建议。

Here are my/some suggestions. 这有我的/一些建议。

篇中句:给出具体建议。

It is also a good idea/also helps to do…, which can… 做……也不错,这能……

An effective suggestion is that you (should)… 一个有效的建议是你应该……

In my opinion/As far as Im concerned / Personally, it would be wise to take the following action. 在我看来,采取如下行动是明智的。

When it comes to/As for…, I would like to suggest / advise / recommend you should… 当涉及/关于……,我建议你应该……

I think it would be of benefit / beneficial if you… 我认为如果……,将会受益。

Doing…is a good/great/better choice. 做……是一个好/棒的/更好的选择。

You may as well/had better do… 你不妨/最好做……

篇尾句:预测可能的结果,给对方以行动的信心和决心。

We are waiting for your good news. 我们期待你的好消息。

Its my pleasure to offer you some advice on... 很荣幸在……方面为你提供建议。

I will be glad if you will take my advice/suggestions into consideration. 如果你能考虑我的建议我将非常高兴。

I hope that my suggestions/advice will be beneficial/of benefit to you.

我希望我的建议对你有益。

I hope you will find my suggestions/advice helpful/useful/practical/beneficial.

我希望你认为我的建议有帮助/有用/实用/有益。

I feel that it would be beneficial if... 我认为如果……将会有益。

Im writing to tell you about the discussion we have had about... 我就我们已经讨论的关于……的问题写信给你。

Ive been thinking about the question you wrote in the letter. In my opinion, you should... 我一直在思考你来信中提到的问题。在我看来,你应该……

You have asked me for my advice with regard to...and I will try to make some constructive suggestions. 就……一事你曾征询过我的意见,我会尽量给你提供一些有建设性的建议。

When it comes to such a situation, I would like to suggest that you can... 当遇到这样的问题时,我建议你可以……

As to the problem you mentioned in the last letter, here are my suggestions. 对于你信中提到的问题,以下是我的建议。

◎经典考题

假定你是李华,收到英国朋友Alice的邮件,以下是邮件内容:

Dear Li Hua,

How are you doing these days· Im having some problems and would like to get your advice.

My parents want me to spend my summer with them this year but I would prefer to go somewhere with my friends. I love my parents but sometimes they are overprotective. I feel that I am old enough and responsible enough to go away without their supervision(監护).

Any suggestions you could give me about this issue would be greatly appreciated.

Yours,

Alice

请给Alice回一封邮件,内容包括:

1. 感谢她的信任;

2. 回应她的请求;

3. 说明你的理由。

注意:

1. 词数100左右;

2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

Dear Alice,

Yours,

Li Hua

【试题解读】

1. 审题立意

此篇书面表达要求学生写一封建议信,根据建议信的语用功能分析,书信的重点内容在于提出合理、有建设性的建议。题目提供了一篇请求帮助的邮件,学生在写作前应认真读邮件,明确写作内容,考虑合理的建议。

2. 写作要点

①感谢对方的信任;

②回应请求:获悉对方遇到困难,表示愿意帮助;

③提出建议:分要点列出;

④说明理由;

⑤表达希望。

【佳作赏析1】

Dear Alice,

Ive received your email saying that youre facing some problems with your parents.① Here are my suggestions.

In my opinion②, although youre old enough to go away with your friends, you need to communicate with your parents properly. Hence, I suggest you have a hearttoheart talk with them.③Remember that they love you so much that they might worry you will be in danger without their company.④ So what you need to do is to show youre independent and to avoid turning this chat into a quarrel.⑤

Hope my suggestion will be of help to you. And hope that youll solve the problem successfully and have a good summer!⑥

Best wishes!

Yours ,

Li Hua

亮点分析:本篇習作语言地道、流畅、自然,词汇丰富,众多的高级句式结构被作者运用得恰到好处。实为一篇不可多得的考场佳作。

① 作者开门见山,简洁地概括出了英国朋友遇到的问题。

② 此句用in my opinion引出自己的观点。类似的表达还有 in my view, as far as Im concerned, personally等等。

③ 句子间行文逻辑性强,有效使用语篇衔接词hence,短语a hearttoheart talk的使用恰到好处。

④ 短短的一句话,却用了三个从句,两个宾语从句和一个状语从句,这使文章句式丰富,值得学习。

⑤ 本句精彩多多,从语言来看,句首so的使用,使句子过渡自然,结构严谨;what引导的主语从句显得高端上档次。

⑥ 文章结尾言语礼节性颇强,非常符合建议信的特点,既提出希望又表达祝愿,be of help =be helpful, 更显高级。

◎小试牛刀

假定你是李华,最近你的英国好友Tom来信说他对高中生活很不适应,不知道如何结交新的朋友。请你用英文给他写一封回信,提出一些建议。内容如下:

1. 与人接触时面带微笑;

2. 学会倾听;

3. 积极参加班级活动并展示自己的才能。

注意:

1. 词数100左右,开头和结尾已经给出,不计入总词数;

2. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

Dear Tom,

Im glad to receive your letter.

Hope my suggestions will be beneficial to you. Looking forward to your early reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

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