❷话题作文——活动与经历

江西 邱世才

★话题概述

有关活动与经历的话题作文一般记录某项具体活动或者生活中的某一方面的经历,同时也记录下了作者在这些活动或经历中所遇到的趣事、参与其中所得到的体会与感受等。

此类话题作文多为记叙文。由于活动或经历大都发生在过去,所以在叙述所见所闻的时候,文章往往以一般过去时的表达为主。

★佳作赏评

An unforgettable day

March 5th was a special day.Let me tell you what we did that day．

On the morning of March 5th,some volunteers from our school went to the People's Nursing Home.The elderly gave us a warm welcome when we got there.We handed flowers and fruit to them,and gave them our best wishes.Then we helped them to do some housework,such as cleaning the windows or making the bed for them.All the old people were smiling at us while we were working．

After that,some of us gave a performance for them,such as singing songs and dancing.Some of us read the newspaper for them.Some chatted with them.When it was time for us to leave,they were grateful for our kindness．

From this meaningful activity,I have learned that we should care for the old and respect them.In our daily life,we should offer our seats to them on a bus and we should chat with them as much as possible.I hope we can have some chances to work for the old people together once again．

【权威点评】

本文记叙了在3月5日“学雷锋纪念日”这天,学校组织志愿者去人民敬老院开展志愿活动的经历,并准确地表达了志愿者们参加志愿活动的感受。从写作的基本框架来看,作者是分为四个自然段完成全文的。具体情况如下：

1.第1段直接开篇点题。该段中的a special day与标题直接相呼应。

2.第2、3段为详细描写。这两段先后交代了本次活动的时间(March 5th)、地点(the People's Nursing Home)、人物(some volunteers from our school)和活动过程(hand flowers and fruit,give best wishes,do some housework,clean the windows,make the bed,give a performance)等。

3.第4段简谈活动后的感想。从活动中，作者感受到大家在生活中应该照顾好老人(care for the old),并尊重老人(respect the old)。“we should...”的两次使用,更深化了主旨。

文中的give sb.a warm welcome,give sb.one's best wishes,help sb.to do sth.,be grateful for,chat with sb.,care for sb.等短语和when,while等从句的使用,显示出作者较好的语言基本功。

总之,全文结构安排合理,句式及词语运用恰当,是一篇比较成功的英语作文。

★思路点拨

finish,have a good time...

【典型句型】

1.We went to...我们去了……

2.We visited... 我们参观(游览)了……

3.We went there by...我们乘坐……去了那里

4.How happy we were!我们太高兴了!

5.All of us were very tired,but happy that day.那天我们都很累了,但是很高兴。

★题例解析

【写作导学】

记叙活动或经历的作文属于记叙文的范畴。对待此类话题的英语作文,在写作时，我们应该注意以下几个方面的问题：

1.明确写作的标题。这类话题的英语作文常采用“An unforgettable...”“A pleasant...”等作为标题。

2.准确应用人称和时态。记叙活动或经历的文章通常使用第一人称。如果描述他人的活动情况,可以使用第三人称。无论以何种人称呈现,时态多以一般过去时为主。

3.注重文章结构或布局。记叙活动或经历的文章主要是从时间、地点、人物、活动和感想几个方面进行布局谋篇。做到这些,我们就能使活动经历的叙述更加顺畅、更有条理。文章结尾往往使用诸如“We all had a good time./We learned a lot from the farmers./What a pleasant day we had!”的句子表达对此次活动或经历的感想、体会,从而深化文章的主题。

【高频词语】

volunteer,together,arrive in/at,get to,go to...with sb.,help sb.(to)do sth.,each other,special day,experience,chat with,care for,enjoy doing,

昨天是端午节,你们班去阳光学校看望留守儿童,给他们送一些书,并参与一些活动。请你以“A pleasant day”为题，给校刊写一篇英语文章,记录当天的活动情况。

要点提示：

1.与留守儿童一起高兴地包粽子、表演节目,并与他们谈心；

2.谈谈你对此次活动的感想。

具体要求：

1.短文应包含所有的提示要点,也可适当增加某些细节,以使行文连贯；

2.词数不能少于100。

参考词汇：Dragon Boat Festival端午节,zongzi粽子,left-behind children留守儿童

A pleasant day

【写作提示】

从所给的题目(A pleasant day)和具体要求可以看出,这是一篇记述端午节去阳光学校看望留守儿童的文章。具体思路如下：

一、结构安排

全文可以分为三个自然段。第一段直接点题,记录活动的时间、地点、主题等情况。短文开头以“Yesterday”为提示,点明活动的时间,为短文的时态定好基调；第二段重点介绍当天的活动,如留守儿童带领大家参观阳光学校、一起包饺子、表演节目、留守儿童喝彩、一起聊天等；第三段用带有强烈感情色彩的简短句子,抒发感受,呼应主题。

二、建议词汇

the Sunshine School,send our regards to sb.,by bike/by bus,go there on foot,walk there,show sb.around,make zongzi together,perform,cheer for sb.,chat with sb.,each other...

三、句型推荐

1.After we got there,the left-behind children showed us around the Sunshine School./The leftbehind children showed us around the Sunshine School after we got there.

2.Weperformedforthethem and they cheered for us./We gave a performance for them and they cheered for us.

3.All of us were very tired,but happy that day./How happy we were!

四、时态与人称

本文是对过去活动的描述,因此应该以一般过去时为主。根据题目中“谈谈你对此次活动的感想”等内容判断,人称应以第一人称为主,适当穿插其他人称。for it for a long time.

In the morning,we met at the school gate.Then we walked there.The left-behind children showed us around the Sunshine School after we got there.We gave some interesting books to them and they felt very happy.We made zongzi together happily.In the afternoon,we performed for them and they cheered for us.After that,we chatted with each other.They were grateful for our help,too.

How happy we were!Helping others is very important in our lives.As the saying goes,“Giving is much better than receiving.”

★尝试练笔

去商店购物是日常生活中很常见的活动。在购物时,你遇到过有趣或难忘的事情吗？请以“A pleasant shopping experience”为题写一篇英语短文,叙述你在“购物”时的所见所闻,并谈谈你的感想。

具体要求：

1.层次清晰,意思连贯,用词准确,书写规范；

3.词数80～100。

A pleasant shopping experience

【参考范文】

A pleasant day

YesterdaywasDragonBoatFestival.My class went to the Sunshine School to help the leftbehind children there and send our regards to them.We were very happy to do that and prepared

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