My valuable cup

谭张艺

I like drinking tea when I am studying， so a tea cup is necessary for me. My cup was made in Liling. It was polished and painted with beautiful color.

Its used for showing the art of tea， and also drinking water in our daily lives. When I worked for a long time or felt worried， drinking some tea could make me relaxed. When I want to give up working hard in Grade Nine， It will remind me of my parents. They care about me and always stand by me. The cup is the best thing that can show their deep love for me. When I see the cup bought carefully by my father， I encourage myself， “You can do it， take I easy .”

Tea is important in my daily lives， and the tea cup is the most important thing in my life.

陳艳老师点评：这是一篇考试作文，小作者语言运用能力不错，能娴熟地运用新近所学语言，如be polished， remind sb. of sth. ， stand by sb. ， show ones deep love等短语，使得文章增色不少。另外，从文章结构来看，开头直接引出话题，中间进行详细描述，结尾部分既与开头呼应又再次点题，是一篇不错的文章！但细看之下，本文还可以更加优化，使得文章逻辑性更强，语言运用更加老到。比较一下修改后的范文：

范文：

I like drinking tea while I am studying， so a tea cup is necessary for me. I have a valuable cup made in Liling， which is a gift from my father. It is polished and painted with beautiful colors.

I use it for showing tea art， and drinking water in my daily life. Whenever I work for a long time and feel tired， drinking some tea can make me relaxed. Whenever I am in trouble， it will remind me of my parents， as if saying， “Take it easy， and you can make it.” The tea cup is the most important thing in my life.