The differences between Grade 7 and Grade 8

Hi， Im Sara. Im a Grade 8 student. I am different from I was in Grade 7.

Im taller and heavier than I was in Grade 7. And Im more and more beautiful. I feel I am smarter than I was in Grade 7. I study English more hard-working than I was in Grade 7. Im friendlier and more carefully so I have more friends than I did in Grade 7. I have longer hair now. All in all， Im better than I was in Grade 7.

Those are my changes. How about you？

黃为老师点评：陈若曦同学的这篇作文总的来说达到了要求：全文开篇点题，第二段从三个方面描述了自己与七年级时候的不同，最后进行了总结，说到自己变得better。但如果第二段能够按照外表、学习、生活这样的顺序来写，就会使文章的主体部分更有层次感。另外，对于hard-working和carefully词性把握不当，导致文章出现了语法错误。

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Hi， Im Sara. Im a Grade 8 student now. I am different from what I was in Grade 7.

Im taller and heavier than I was in Grade 7. And I have longer hair so I look more beautiful. I have made more friends because Im popular in my class. Also， I feel I am smarter because I have learned much more. I am more careful and I study English harder than I did in Grade 7. I believe I can get still better grades. All in all， Im far better than I was one year ago.

Those are my changes. How about yours？