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My Dream Job

2015-05-30吕鸿妤

初中生学习·低 2015年2期
关键词:点题状语梦想

吕鸿妤

提示:每个人都有自己的梦想工作,并立志努力为实现梦想而努力。你的梦想工作是什么?为什么你选择这样的梦想工作?你要如何实现这个梦想呢?请以My Dream Job为题,结合课本知识及自身实际写一篇英语短文。

要求:80词左右。

My dream job is a fantastic job for many people. I want to be a journalist. And Im going to study hard to make my dream come true.

First, Im going to write articles and send them to newspapers and magazines. I am going to practice writing something when I have free time. Then, I want to study at a university in Beijing when I finish high school. I will try to get good grades at the university. After that, I want to work at a TV station and travel around the world with my good friends.

As long as I try my best to do what I want to do, everything will not be difficult for me.

【简评】本文主要描述了小作者的梦想工作,My dream job is a fantastic job for many people. I want to be a journalist. 开篇点题。主体部分根据自己的实际情况,分别描述目前、高中以及大学毕业后,制定切实可行的目标为之努力。同时也教育了那些没有理想和目标,有些迷茫的同学,这是本文的成功之处。从语言的使用角度来说,不但使用了一些生动的动词,准确的名词,同时使用了时间状语从句,条件状语从句和宾语从句。

指导教师:王静

My Dream Job 刘佳怡

Everyone has his dream job. My dream job is to be a doctor,because I think it is the greatest job in the world.

As we know, health is money. But in modern life, many people are not good in health. If I am a doctor, I will help people get rid of their diseases. If I am a doctor, I am going to save peoples lives. If I am a doctor, I will try my best to bring happiness to others.

Then how am I going to do that? First, I should study hard and do my homework carefully every day. Next I will go to college after high school. Finally, I will work for patients in a hospital in Beijing. I believe my dream will come true one day.

【简评】本文是一篇有关职业梦想的作文,有了梦想,生活才会有目标。小作者充分运用了所学单词、句型、条件状语从句以及一般将来时态。用first, next, finally分3点来说明为梦想工作所做的努力,条理清晰。最后紧扣主题,既是总结又是方向。小作者采用的是总分总的结构,中心明确,是一篇值得借鉴的佳作。

指导教师:曹丽霞

编辑/丁俊玲

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