I Love My Mother

【栏目要求】

1. 将学生习作根据中考评分标准给出成绩; 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号;

3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由; 4. 给学生习作点评“优点与不足”;

5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。

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姜经志 男，中学英语高级教师、安徽省骨干教师、淮北市优秀教师、中国外语学习研究会会员、《中学生英语》特约编委、《学英语》和《英语周报》特约编辑。多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇，并有多篇论文获奖；曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》、《英语奥林匹克》、《新目标英语八年级暑假作业》，参编《高中英语知识点反馈与阅读》、《初中英语题典大全》、《21世纪英语学习指南》等；多次辅导学生在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。

I Love My Mother

There are many people around me, but I love my mother best.

My mother is a teacher, and she is also a great mother. She tries to do what she can ①help me with my study and in my life. She often tells me to work hard and to be honest. Without her help, I cant grow ②healthy.

My mother is very busy. But every morning, she gets up early to make breakfast. She takes good care of me. One midnight, I had a high fever. She was very ③worry and took me to the hospital at once. She took care of me all the time. Two days later, I was well again but she fell ill. I was truly sorry for that.

1. 优点：

本篇文章写出了对母亲的爱。语言准确，层次分明，感情真挚。举例真实可信。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①help改为to help。此处应用动词不定式to help作目的状语。

②healthy改为healthily。grow 在这里是实义动词，不是系动词，意为“成长”，所以其后应用副词healthily修饰。

③worry改为worried。worried 是形容词，意为“着急；焦虑”。

3. 评分：

按中考英语作文满分20分的标准，本文修改前可得18分。

For my mother, Ill do my best to be a good child. Ill love her forever.

(安徽省濉溪县四铺中心学校胡雨晨)