Our School Rules

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Our school have many rules①.So I’m unhappy.

For example,first,we’re not allowed to wear cool jeans.The teacher said it will influence our studies.But I don’t think so.If we wear cool clothes,we will feel more comfortable.Second,we’re not allowed to hang out and watch TV from Monday to Friday evenings.And we have lots of homework to do.Last,we students are not allowed to get her②ears pierced.I agree③them.

Our school is strict with us,but it is good for us.We all got good grades by the strict rules.

湖北省洪湖市老湾中心学校九（2）班 邓瑜

1.优点：

对于九年级的毕业生来说，这是一篇不错的习作。文章采用了总分总的结构,前后呼应,首尾连贯，结构十分严谨,条理也非常清晰。第一段介绍了学校有很多规则；第二段举例说明，层次清晰，并对这些规定逐个发表了自己的看法；第三段总结，理性地肯定了学校的规定。

2.需要修改的地方：

①Our school have many rules.改为There are many rules in our school.学校为物，表示“事物具有……”的句型应该用there be。

② her改为their。前后人称不一致，主语用的是students，因此物主代词相应使用their。

③agree改为agree with。表示同意某人应该用agree with sb.。

3.评分：

按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得13分。