My English Teacher

安徽省濉溪县百善中心学校八（8）班 赵帅

My English Teacher

安徽省濉溪县百善中心学校八（8）班 赵帅

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姜经志 男，中学英语高级教师，省级骨干教师，淮北市优秀教师，中国外语学习研究会会员，《学英语》、《英语周报》特约编辑。多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇，并有多篇论文获奖。曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》、《英语奥林匹克》等，多次辅导学生在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。

Hello,everybody!My name is Zhao Shuai.I’m in Baishan Middle School.All of my classmates and I like one of our teachers very much.She is friendly to us.Can you guess who ①is she?Oh,she’s my English teacher—Zhang Juan.We often call her“Miss Zhang”.Now,let me introduce Miss Zhang②for you.

She is neither too tall nor too short.She is thin.She has short hair.She has two big eyes and a small nose.She often wears red clothes.

Miss Zhang is good③to singing.She can also④plays the piano very well.She told us she⑤can play the piano when she was eight years old.

She is very kind to us.In class,she is like our mother.She often reads stories to us in English.From these,we ⑥cann’t only increase our interests in English,but also extend our vocabulary.It is really good for us.

After class she has many things to do.There are always many exercise books on her desk.She has to correct them for us.So our teacher’s daily life is very busy.We learn from her that“No pain,no gains”.But sometimes she plays games with us.

This is our English teacher,a good teacher.We all like her very much.

1.优点：

小作者全面地描写了英语老师的肖像，说明了老师的性格特点、敬业精神，用词准确，表达生动，引用老师的座右铭起到了画龙点睛的作用。

2.需要修改的地方：

①is she应改为she is。宾语从句应用陈述句语序，即主语在前，谓语在后。

②for应改为to。“向某人介绍某人”应用introduce sb.to sb.，介词必须用to。

③to应改为at。表示“擅长”应用be good at。be good to sb.则表示“对某人好”的意思。

④plays应改为play。can是情态动词，后面应接动词原形。

⑤ can应改为could。表示“过去能……”，应用can的过去式could。

⑥ cann’t应改为 can not或 can’t。can not的缩写应该是 can’t。

3.评分：

按中考英语作文满分20分的标准，本文修改前可得16分。