A Pleasant Trip to Beijing

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姜经志 男，中学英语高级教师，省级骨干教师，淮北市优秀教师，中国外语学习研究会会员，《中学生英语》兼职编委。多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇，并有多篇论文获奖。曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》、《英语奥林匹克》等书，辅导学生多人次在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。

A Pleasant Trip to Beijing

My uncle and I went on a vacation in Beijing during last year’s National Day. In the first day in Beijing， we went to visited the Great Wall. On the second day， we visited Tian’anmen Square， the Summer Palace and other places of interest.

We too visited the biggest zoo in Beijing. We seed many kinds of animals there. They were tigers， lions， elephants， pandas， giraffes and so on. They were very interesting. They did much funny action. Both of us are so happy at that time.

What a great time we had on the trip to Beijing!

安徽省濉溪县求实中学八（2）班 丁斐

点评

1. 优点:

本文层次清晰、语句流畅、言简意赅。小作者能较为熟练地运用学过的知识来写作文，说明小作者具有比较扎实的英语语言基本功。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① In改为On。表示“在具体的某一天”应用介词on。

② visited改为visit。go to do sth. 意为“去做某事”，to后应接动词原形。

③ too改为also。too和also都表示“也”的意思，但too常用于句末，而also则常用于谓语动词之前。

④ seed改为saw。see过去式为saw。

⑤ are改为were。根据上下文判断此处应该用一般过去时。

3. 评分：

按照中考英语作文满分15分的标准，本文修改前可得12分。