新目标英语七年级（下）单元写作步步高（Ｕｎｉｔｓ ６～７）

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Unit 6 Its raining！

写作目标：描写天气状况

写作导引：本单元要求学生能够用学过的词语和句式，用一般现在时和现在进行时来描写天气状况，并描述人们在各种天气状况下进行的活动，同时说明自己对某种天气的好恶及原因。在写作过程中，应注意正确使用表达天气的词语以及动词的现在分词。

一、 关键词

1. 表示天气状况的形容词：rainy，snowy，windy，cloudy，sunny，hot，cold，cool，warm，humid

2. 动词短语：play basketball，watch TV，have a party，ride camels，look at，take photos，play the guitar

二、 句式

1. Its raining. Im watching TV.

2. Its hot. Hes swimming.

3. Its sunny.

4. Theyre playing basketball.

三、 语法：一般现在时和现在进行时互动平台：

Q：Hows the weather today？

A：__1__

Q：What are you doing？

A：__2__

Q：What is he doing？

A：__3__

Q：What is she doing？

A：__4__

Q：What are they doing？

A：__5__

整合总结：1. Its sunny. 2. Im looking at the sky. 3. He is playing with a yo-yo. 4. She is reading. 5. They are playing games.

将对上述问题的答语用适当的词语连接在一起，就是一篇比较完整的作文了。如果想写得更好，还可以适当增加文中的细节或添加恰当的修饰词语。

实战演练：

试以上面的问答内容为提示，以“The Weather and the People”为题，写一篇短文。要求不少于60个词。

病文候诊：

原文：

The Weather and the People

Today is Sunday. The weather is sun①. It is not hot and② cold. I and my friends③ are playing in the park. Some girls are playing the guitar. One of them are④ looking at them. Some boys are playing football，but one boy isnt playing. He is working，because so⑤ he is a referee (裁判员). Do you know who he is？ Yes，he is me.

分析：这篇短文首先介绍了天气情况，接着介绍了朋友们所进行的活动。文章语言流畅，条理清晰。但文中有几处错误需要纠正。

① 这个句子是系表结构，因此系动词is后面应跟名词sun的形容词形式，即跟sunny作表语。

② 并列连词and通常用于肯定句，而or通常用于否定句。因此，应将and改为or。

③ 当几个不同的人称代词并列作主语时，第一人称代词通常放在最后，即my friends and I。

④ one of后面加上名词的复数形式或人称代词的宾格形式时，指众多人或物中的一个，即表达单数意义。因此，这种主语后面的谓语动词应为单数形式，故应将are改为is。

⑤ because意为“因为”，so意为“所以”，两者不能同时用在一个句子中。此处表示原因，只能用because，故应去掉so。

修改稿：

The Weather and the People

Today is Sunday. The weather is sunny. It is not hot or cold. My friends and I are playing in the park. Some girls are playing the guitar. One of them is looking at them. Some boys are playing football，but one boy isnt playing. He is working，because he is a referee. Do you know who he is？ Yes，he is me.

写作训练：

根据下面列举的参考词语，以“A Fine Day”为题，写一篇40个词左右的短文。

参考词语：fine，cool，on the playground，play basketball，play football，play volleyball，have a good time，be happy

参考范文：

A Fine Day

How fine it is today！ The air is cool. We are having our P.E. class on the playground. The teacher lets us play balls. The boys are playing basketball and football. The girls are playing volleyball. We are having a good time. How happy we are！

Unit 7 What does he look like？

写作目标：描写人物外貌特征

写作导引：本单元写作的重点是根据人体的特点描写人物外貌特征。在描写过程中，可以按人体部位从上到下进行描写，也可以先写重点，再写细节。描写人物时，要用准确的形容词突出人物的特征和个性。

一、 关键词

1. 形容词：short，curly，straight，thin，popular，blonde，brown，good-looking，bald

2. 名词：hair，height，build，beard，mustache（唇上面的胡须）

二、 句式

1. Im short.

2. Im thin.

3. Theyre medium height.

4. He has a medium build.

5. She is tall. She has curly hair.

三、 语法：“be + 形容词”构成的系表结构

互动平台：

Q：What does your father look like？

A：__1__

Q：What does your mother look like？

A：__2__

Q：What about you？

A：__3__

Q：Who do you look like？

A：__4__

整合总结：1. My father is medium height. 2. My mother is short and thin. 3. I have curly hair and a medium build. 4. I look like my father.

将以上的答语用适当的词语连接在一起，就成一篇作文了。当然，可根据实际情况对文中的细节作相应的变动，也可添加一些适当的修饰词语。

实战演练：

根据上面的问答内容，以“Im Good-looking”为题，写一篇短文。要求不少于50个词。

病文候诊：

原文：

Im Good-looking

I am the captain for① the basketball team. Im tall and thin. I am a② strong build. I have short，straight，black hair. I like to say③ jokes. I like also④ reading. But I like playing basketball best，because I do well in play⑤ it.

分析：本篇文章简要地介绍了自己的外貌特征、性格和爱好。文章语言简洁，结构严谨，但仍有几处错误需要纠正。

① “队长”是“篮球队”的，即属“篮球队”所有。此义与“of”相符。因此，应将for改为of。

② 表达“我有一副强健的体魄”。既可以说“I have a strong build.”，也可以说“I am strong build.”。 用后一种表达方法时，名词build前面不能带不定冠词“a”。

③ tell jokes意为“讲笑话”，是惯用搭配。因此，应将say改为tell。

④ also意为“也”，在句中应位于行为动词之前，即like之前。

⑤ 介词in后面应接名词或动名词形式，故应将play改为playing。

修改稿：

Im Good-looking

I am the captain of the basketball team. Im tall and thin. I am strong build. I have short，straight，black hair. I like to tell jokes. I also like reading. But I like playing basketball best，because I do well in playing it.

写作训练：

根据下面的汉语提示，以“My Favorite Singer”为题，写一篇短文，介绍一下自己最喜欢的歌手。要求不少于60个词。

1. 最喜欢的歌手是谁

2. 他（她）的外貌特征

3. 他（她）的业余爱好

参考范文：

My Favorite Singer

I like popular music. My favorite singer is Sun Yanzi. She is gorgeous.

She has a medium build. She is thin but she is healthy. She has short，straight，black hair. She always wears a T-shirt and jeans. She often has a beautiful smile.

She likes singing. I like her songs like The felicity（幸福） I want，Olive and so on. I like her song Meet very much.

I hope she can sing more new songs for us.