My School Trip to the Park

Last week， our school organized a trip to the park. It is so memorable that I still feel excited when I recall it.

To get to the park as fast as possible， we took the bus instead of walking there. As soon as we got off the bus， we saw a big park gate which was decorated with colorful flowers. After wandering around the park， we decided to have a picnic. We sat on the grass， enjoying the delicious food and the beautiful nature view. What’s more， we also climbed the mountain to enjoy the fresh air. Finally， we went back to school.

Although time went fast， I had a good time there. This activity not only enables me to embrace the nature closely， but also gives me a chance to relax from the heavy schoolwork. How meaningful it is！

河南省郑州金桂中学

指导老师 卢 婷

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文章结构清晰，衔接自然流畅。第一段自然点题，第二段对到公园的学校旅行进行了生动形象的描述，最后一段总结全文，阐明此次旅行的意义和“我”的感悟。其中，好词好句也应用自如，如“memorable”“ as fast as possible”“instead of”“decorated with”“not only... but also...”“embrace the nature”等，运用非常灵活，值得借鉴。