读写语料库之劳动生活

广东 吴娟娟

美好的生活要靠劳动来创造，劳动教育是生活的必修课，它既可以培养孩子自理和自立的能力，也可以增强孩子的自信心和责任感。因此，我们不仅要引导孩子正确认识劳动的价值，更要鼓励他们积极参加劳动实践，体验生活，使他们通过劳动品尝甜蜜的收获，体味成长的喜悦。

本次读后续写之劳动生活专题将以一篇关于劳动与成长的小故事为例，阐述一般文学作品中比较常用的劳动教育的三个步骤：劳动前的认知—劳动中的体验—劳动成长后的感悟。

主题微语境

本文以奶奶提议孙子孙女们和她一起在后院种植蔬菜为线索展开，讲述了祖孙两代人一起劳动时的生活体验以及收获后孩子们的认知变化和内心感悟。

It was early spring and Nana was in the backyard with her grandchildren.Amy, Michael, and Justin were playing when Nana said,“I'm going to start planting my garden.Who wants to help me?”

“What are you going to plant, Nana?”asked Amy.“I like big,yellow sunflowers.”

“I'm going to plant vegetables.That way we can have them to eat when they are ready,”said Nana.

“How long does that take?”asked Michael.He liked vegetables sometimes,especially carrots.

“It will take a few months before anything is ready to eat,”answered Nana.The children were surprised.

“Months?Why would you do all that work and then have to wait so long?”asked Amy.“You should just go to the store and buy them.”

“Patience,my sweeties!Don't you know food always tastes best when you grow it yourself?”replied Nana.“And if all of you come to help,it won't be too much work.”

“I'll help you, Nana,”offered Justin.He put down the soccer ball and went to look at the gardening tools Nana had laid out.“What do we do first?”Michael and Amy came over to look,too.

Nana taught Justin how to use a trowel (小铲子) to dig small rows of holes for the seeds.Next, Nana showed Amy how to pour the seeds into each hole.And it was Michael's job to cover up the holes with soil.Finally, Amy wrote the vegetable names on sticks that Justin pushed into the ground.“This way we can remember which vegetable seeds we have planted,”said Nana.

When they had planted everything, the children took turns filling up the watering can so that Nana could make the soil nice and wet for the seeds to start to grow.

“Now we just water them a little every day, and with some time and sunshine, we'll have some delicious things to eat in the summer,”said Nana.

Whenever the grandchildren came to visit, they would dash into the garden.Eager to help grow the vegetables well,they first took turns to water the plants.And then they would remove the weeds that popped up around the plants and apply organic fertilizer under Nana's instruction if necessary.

As time went by, the plants were growing taller and stronger.When they noticed the tomatoes turning red, the cucumbers hiding under the green leaves and the peppers growing bigger, their eyes were sparkling like diamonds.Never had they looked forward to summer like this before.But they clearly knew that it's worthwhile to wait for the inviting results.

Finally, Nana said it was time for the first harvest.Hearing that, the children all jumped into the air and cheers filled the whole garden.Nana gave them each a basket and took them around the garden.Together they gathered some of the cucumbers,carrots,tomatoes and cabbages.Then for the following hour, they were busying making vegetable salad.The children helped wash the dirt off the food while Nana chopped up all the vegetables,which were turned into delicacies.

When Nana asked who wanted to try the fresh salad,everyone expressed their willingness excitedly.Tasting the salad, they thought nothing could be more delicious, because it was they who grew these vegetables.They all learned that many hands make light work and patience really pays off.

一、劳动前的认知

“How long does that take?”asked Michael.He liked vegetables sometimes, especially carrots.

“It will take a few months before anything is ready to eat,”answered Nana.The children were surprised.

“Months? Why would you do all that work and then have to wait so long?”asked Amy.“You should just go to the store and buy them.”

“Patience,my sweeties!Don't you know food always tastes best when you grow it yourself?”replied Nana.“And if all of you come to help,it won't be too much work.”“那需要多长时间？”迈克尔问。他有时喜欢吃蔬菜，尤其是胡萝卜。“要过好几个月才能吃到这些蔬菜。”奶奶回答。孩子们很惊讶。

“几个月？您为什么愿意做那么多工作然后还要等这么久？”艾米问。“您应该去商店买。”

“耐心点，我的宝贝们！难道你不知道自己种的菜味道最好吗？”奶奶回答。“如果你们都来帮忙，工作就不会太多。”

表1 劳动前的认知表达

二、劳动中的体验

Nana taught Justin how to use a trowel to dig small rows of holes for the seeds.Next,Nana showed Amy how to pour the seeds into each hole.And it was Michael's job to cover up the holes with soil.Finally, Amy wrote the vegetable names on sticks that Justin pushed into the ground.“This way we can remember which vegetable seeds we have planted,”said Nana.

When they had planted everything, the children took turns filling up the watering can so that Nana could make the soil nice and wet for the seeds to start to grow.

“Now we just water them a little every day, and with some time and sunshine, we'll have some delicious things to eat in the summer,”said Nana.

奶奶教贾斯廷如何用小铲子给种子挖出一排排小洞。接着，她又向艾米展示了如何把种子倒进每个洞里。迈克尔的工作就是用土把洞盖起来。最后，艾米把蔬菜的名字写在贾斯廷插在地上的小棍子上。“这样我们就能记住我们种下了哪些蔬菜种子。”奶奶说。

当他们种完所有的种子后，孩子们轮流把洒水壶装满水，这样奶奶就可以让土壤变得又好又湿，种子就可以开始生长了。

“现在我们只需每天浇一点水，有了时间和阳光，夏天我们就有美味的东西吃了。”奶奶说。

Whenever the grandchildren came to visit, they would dash into the garden.Eager to help grow the vegetables well, they first took turns to water the plants.And then they would remove the weeds that popped up around the plants and apply organic fertilizer under Nana's instruction if necessary.每当孙子孙女们过来时，他们都会冲进花园。因为他们迫不及待地想帮助蔬菜长得更好，所以他们首先轮流给植物浇水，然后他们会清除周围冒出的杂草，必要时还会在奶奶的指导下施用有机肥。

As time went by, the plants were growing taller and stronger.When they noticed the tomatoes turning red, the cucumbers hiding under the green leaves and the peppers growing bigger, their eyes were sparkling like diamonds.Never had they looked forward to summer like this before.But they clearly knew that it's worthwhile to wait for the inviting results.随着时间的流逝，这些植物长得又高又壮。当他们注意到西红柿变红了，黄瓜藏在绿叶下，辣椒变大了时，他们的眼睛像钻石一样闪闪发光。他们从来没有像现在这样盼望夏天。但他们清楚地知道，等待这诱人的结果是值得的。

表2 劳动过程中的表达

三、劳动成长后的感悟

When Nana asked who wanted to try the fresh salad,everyone expressed their willingness excitedly.Tasting the salad, they thought nothing could be more delicious, because it was they who grew these vegetables.They all learned that many hands make light work and patience really pays off.当奶奶问谁想尝尝新鲜的沙拉时，每个人都兴奋地表示愿意。品尝着沙拉，他们觉得没有什么比这更美味的了，因为这些蔬菜是他们自己种的。他们还学到了“众人拾柴火焰高”和耐心是有回报的道理。

表3 劳动成长前后对比

句式微练习

一、特殊句式

续写时采用多种不同的句式可以解决表达单一的问题，从而改变叙述节奏，使句式更丰富、表述更多变。

1.Don't you know food always tastes best when you grow it yourself? (使用否定疑问句表达肯定的意思，表示强调语气)

2.Never had they looked forward to summer like this before.(否定词never位于句首的部分倒装，表示强调和加强语气)

3.Because it was they who grew these vegetables.(强调句型)即学即练

1.你难道不知道她下周要来？

____________________that she is coming next week?2.他们以前从没碰到过这种情况。

____________________such circumstance as this.3.正是在这时母女之间的误会消除了。

____________________was cleared up.

二、连贯动作的运用

分解动作能够延缓故事节奏，从而表现人物的强烈情绪，构建出电影慢动作般的画面感。

He put down the soccer ball and went to look at the gardening tools Nana had laid out.（连贯动作的运用）

即学即练

1.马克跳下自行车，冲到汽车后座，迅速关上门。

2.父亲只是慈爱地拍了拍她的背，吻了吻她的额头，然后冲进了他的办公室。

三、从句的运用

运用定语从句给读者提供相对全面的背景信息，运用宾语从句交代人物的心理状态和内心活动。

1.And then they would remove the weeds that popped up around the plants and apply organic fertilizer under Nana's instruction if necessary.(定语从句)

2.Amy wrote the vegetable names on sticks that Justin pushed into the ground.(定语从句)

3.But they clearly knew that it's worthwhile to wait for the inviting results.(宾语从句；it is worthwhile to do句型)

4.They all learned that many hands make light work and patience really pays off.(宾语从句)

即学即练

1.烟很浓，熏得他几乎要晕倒。

The smoke was overwhelming ____________________.2.她感到非常害怕，想知道她们是否能活着出去。

She felt very frightened and wondered ____________________.

3.他们都相信为自己热爱的事情而奋斗是值得的。

They all believe ____________________.

四、表示心理的形容词或形容词短语作状语的运用

表示心理的形容词或形容词短语作状语，表示原因、行为方式或伴随状态，比运用从句表达显得更加简明。

Eager to help grow the vegetables well,they first took turns to water the plants.(表示心理的形容词短语作状语)

即学即练

1.克鲁索两眼盯着脚印看，内心充满着恐惧。

Crusoe stared at the footprint, ____________________.

2.乐意接受这个建议，杰克点头同意了。

____________________,Jack nodded his agreement.

五、非谓语和无灵主语的运用

非谓语不仅能表示不同的逻辑关系，还能使句内语义更紧凑；无灵主语能突出人物的心理和情感，使语言描写生动形象，表达更有力量。

1.Hearing that, the children all jumped into the air and cheers filled the whole garden.(非谓语作状语；无灵主语)

2.Tasting the salad,they thought nothing could be more delicious.(非谓语作状语)

3.When they noticed the tomatoes turning red, the cucumbers hiding under the green leaves and the peppers growing bigger, their eyes were sparkling like diamonds.(非谓语作宾补的并列；比喻修辞)

即学即练

1.恐惧笼罩了整个村庄。

2.落日见证了这座城市的美丽。

3.打开盒子，看到里面有一块精美的手表，我的下巴都快掉下来了。

情境微仿写

（改编自2021年新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写）

The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day.1.____________________(母亲会多么高兴和自豪啊)when they brought her breakfast in bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.2.____________________(这一天终于到来了).The alarm rang at 6 am.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast.3.____________________(杰夫在盘子里打了两个鸡蛋，加了一些牛奶).Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread.This time,she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.

Then Jeff 4.____________________(注意到蒸汽从锅里冒出来，盖子开始摇晃).The next minute,the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully,5.____________________(杰夫保持冷静并迅速关掉了煤气).But the stove was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.

As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.“Don't panic!”He handed each one a wet towel,6.____________________(帮助他们快速收拾残局).After that, Jeff stammered out their plan, his face flushing.However, Father laughed,“Sounds great! I can teach you to cook.”At this, Jenna and Jeff almost jumped to their feet, joy in eyes.Under his careful guidance, it didn't take long before the French toast and chicken porridge were ready.Everything settled, Father left the kitchen,7.____________________(答应保守秘密).

The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.8.____________________(与他们微笑的目光相遇),Mother felt confused until they presented the breakfast and said“Happy Mother's Day”.Mother gave them a tight hug.“Unbelievable! You can cook!9.____________________(这是我收到的最大的惊喜).”10.____________________(她喜笑颜开).“They have known how to take care of others,”Father said in response to her excitement, winking at Jenna and Jeff.They couldn't help giggling.It was a secret only shared between them.

语篇微演练

阅读下列短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

The twins, Jenna and Jeff, were good at most things.Their dad was good at most things,too.But there was one thing the twins and Dad were not good at—that was chores.It wasn't that Dad and the twins didn't want to do their chores.It was just that they always seemed to have reasons not to do them.And they had such good excuses.

“You're right, my dear,”said Dad.“The grass does need cutting.But a spider has spun a wonderful web on the lawn mower and I haven't the heart to put all her hard work to waste.”

“Mum,”said Jenna,“I know it's my week to put up my cards.It's just that I'm waiting for them to dry.They'll be easier to scoop up that way.”

“Mum,”said Jeff,“may I skip setting the table tonight? There's a TV show on the Ice Age,and I have to do a report on the beast of Baluchistan.”

There were also endless quarrels about who did what and who got the easy job.Mum sighed.If only Dad and the twins were as good at doing their chores as they were at arguing about them, life would be easier.Talking of chores, Mum thought instead of pushing them for chores, it would be a lot easier to do them herself.And that was what she did.She put away all cards and set and cleared the table.She chased the dust bunnies from under the furniture and cleaned up the twins'messy room.

The twins did pick up and put away things occasionally.Dad did cut the grass once in a while.Not surprisingly, things began to slide.Everybody got a little unhappy, especially Mum,who spent much time doing chores.Something had to be done.But what?

注意：续写词数应为150左右。

Paragraph 1:

Mum decided to host a family meeting.______________________________________

Paragraph 2:

Living in all that messy build-up wasn't much fun.______________________________