被“天使”吻过的歌声

广东 袁丹纯

患有先天性生理缺陷的埃米莉·怀特有着美妙的好嗓音，她想要参加一年一度的表演却被音乐老师欧文斯夫人无情拒绝。在她遇见新的音乐老师巴特勒先生后，出现了新的转机。

1Emily White was born with so many birth problems in her body 17 years ago.Some of her organs,bones and muscles were out of shape,because of which no one expected her to survive long.To everyone's surprise,she did make it but with her strange body figure.Everyone could recognize her,even from a distance.

2In her hometown,a yearly outdoor performance was held in the school auditorium(礼堂).It had been performed for so many years and actually had become one of the most important events of the Christmas season for many of the locals.

3Many people tried out each year for it,but so many were turned away.It can only include the most excellent people in the field.

4Emily had a beautiful singing voice.Last year she went to Mrs Owens,her music teacher,to ask to join in the performance.Without letting her sing,Mrs Owens took a glance at Emily's body and said,“Child,you are just not suitable.Everyone would stare at you and that would make you uncomfortable.It would make them uncomfortable,too.”

5Without singing a single note,Emily was sent back through the door of the choral room.Hurt and upset,she decided never to try out again.But Mrs Owens then retired.

6This year,there came a new music teacher,Mr Butler.He heard about Emily and suggested that she have a try.

7Afraid to be rejected again,Emily hesitated about it.As Emily struggled,the door was pushed open and Mr Butler called,“Emily,you're next.”Kind of nervous as she was,Emily did as Mr Butler told her to.Mr Butler sat by the piano to keep Emily company.When Emily finished h er testing performance,she thanked Mr Butler and knew the result would be posted on the door of the choral room the next day.

8Emily couldn't sleep that night.She tossed and turned in bed one thousand times.She wassuffering fromthe feelings that she didn't fit and the great need to be accepted.By the next morning,she still got butterflies in her stomach.

阅读上面的短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。注意：

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

Paragraph 1:

Emily hurried to the choral room and anxiously glanced at the list on the door._________

Paragraph 2:

Finally,the day for the performance came.

写作导引

Ⅰ.Sorting the elements

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Ⅱ.Analyzing the characters'personalities

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Ⅲ.Exploring the theme

What is the text about?And what does the author want to tell us by telling this story?

Ⅳ.Discovering language features

1.Analyzing language features

（1）丰富的with/without结构，使文章较为活泼、灵动。

Emily White was born with so many birth problems in her body 17 years ago.(Para.1)

Without letting her sing,Mrs Owens took a glance at Emily's body...(Para.4)

Without singing a single note,Emily was sent back through the door of the choral room.(Para.5)

（2）过去分词作伴随状语，与逻辑主语为被动关系，使用较为地道。

Hurt and upset,she decided never to try out again.(Para.5)

整体而言，城市的磁力，往往在鲁迅身陷逆境中表现得尤为明显，如绍兴、仙台、厦门、广州等，当鲁迅每次遇到急流险滩，感到举步维艰之时，现代城市都充当了他的诺亚方舟，发挥了施救作用，使他重燃希望。它适时挽救了“乡间”[3]和“孤岛”[4]上一颗疲命挣扎的灵魂，帮助鲁迅从精神困境中找到一条生路，从而制止他退化为“村人”[5]、“木偶人”[6]。这从鲁迅的“东京→绍兴”“东京→仙台”“北京→厦门、广州”等行程中可见一斑。

（3）“adj.+as/though＋主语+谓语”结构一方面强调形容词，一方面让读者眼前一亮，令读者印象深刻。

Kind of nervous as she was,Emily did as Mr Butler told her to.(Para.7)

（4）形象的比喻修辞手法，让表达更生动有趣。

By the next morning,she still got butterflies in her stomach（非常紧张）.（Para.8）

2.Discovering useful expressions

hurt and upset又伤心又沮丧

kind of nervous as she is尽管她有些紧张

make sb uncomfortable让某人不舒服

struggle挣扎

toss and turn in bed one thousand times辗转难眠

suffer from忍受……

the great need to be accepted急需被接纳

get butterflies in her stomach非常紧张

Ⅴ.Conceiving new plots

续写第一段：

从文章最后一段埃米莉彻夜难眠，紧张等待选拔结果的情节可以推测出在未看到结果前埃米莉的紧张心理，推荐表达有“S hake violently,vibrate with tension and chew her lower lip nervously,feeling as if her heart would jump out.”。

从续写第一段的段首句，我们得知埃米莉即将得知结果，我们可根据以下问题链推测：

1.What would the result be like given the fact that Emily had a beautiful singing voice?

2.What would Emily do and say after knowing the result?

3.Would Mr Butler show up at this special moment?

续写第二段的段首句“Finally,the day for the performance came.（终于，表演那一天来了）”预示了埃米莉应该通过了选拔，并暗示通过用心排练，埃米莉“终于”迎来这一天。因此，在续写的第一段应该包括以上的信息。

续写第二段：

结合续写第二段的段首句和以下问题，我们可以进行推测：

1.How would Emily feel when she showed up on the stage given the fact that she lacked self-confidence?

2.If Emily didn't feel confident on the stage,who might help her?

观察故事开始的情节，根据首尾呼应的原则，预测最后一段的内容。

Would Emily become different although she still had“so many birth problems in her body”?

从作者的写作目的推测结局的走向。为了保持与前文主题的一致性，我们可以推测故事的结局——埃米莉或许通过老师的鼓励在这次表演上取得成果，获得信心，呼应主题。表示“开心或满意”的相关表达有feel a sudden tingle of excitement、in a state of great excitement、beam with smiles/joy。