精彩结尾，画龙点睛

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在读后续写中，结尾发挥着非常重要的作用，精彩的结尾好似画龙点睛，让人回味无穷。常见的结尾方式有景物描写结尾、哲理性语言结尾、自然结尾等。

除基本的揭示故事结尾外，在表现手法上，结尾还应与前文伏笔照应，使人觉得在情理之中;与前文形成对比，点明主旨，深化主题。在塑造人物形象上，结尾应表现人的心理、性格、品质、经历、命运、能力等。在故事情节上，结尾还可以照应标题和开头，使故事结构完整。

下面以2020年新高考全国卷I（山东卷）为例，介绍几种简单易学的结尾方式，希望对同学们有所借鉴。

【2020年新高考全国卷I（山东）】

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline， some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.

Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems， and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time， she would bring food and medicine to them.

One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed， his wife， who took care of him and could not go out to work， and their little boy. The little boy -his name was Bernard-had interested her very much.

“I wish you could see him，” she said to her own children， John， Harry， and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money， but I dont see what he can do.”

After their mother left the room， the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money，” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”

“So do I，” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”

For some moments， John said nothing， but， suddenly， he sprang to his feet and cried， “I have a great idea！ I have a solution that we can all help accomplish（完成）.”

The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea， it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do，” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us？ Well， we can make popcorn （爆米花）， and put it into paper bags， and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”

Paragraph 1： When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea， she thought it was a good one， too.

Paragraph 2： With everything ready， Bernard started out on his new business.

【解析】本文是根据短文进行续写，使之成为一个完整的故事。

1.认真读懂所提供的材料：善良的Meredith一家住在一个小社区里，他们想帮助一个贫困的家庭。那家的男主人生病卧床，女主人要照顾丈夫，无法外出赚钱，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生活十分困難。后来，Meredith的孩子想出了一个主意——制作爆米花，让Bernard去卖爆米花。

2.根据所给材料确定文章主题：Meredith如何通过制作和卖爆米花来帮助Bernard一家摆脱困境。

3.续写部分和前面的文章要衔接得上，并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致，故事情节的向后延续和发展要合乎情理。

4.根据第一段首句When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea， she thought it was a good one， too.（当Meredith太太听到John的主意时，她也认为这是个好主意）可以针对如何实现制作爆米花这个提议展开构思;根据第二段首句With everything ready， Bernard started out on his new business.（一切准备就绪后，Bernard開始了他的新生意）可以针对Bernard如何通过卖爆米花让家庭摆脱困境以及他的感受（高兴、感恩等）展开构思。

5.续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致。文章时态以一般过去时为主。考生应使用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作，要注意尽可能地使句子的表达形式多样化，适当地使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅;切合题干要求，句子结构准确;适当补充信息，使篇章结构连贯。

一、哲理式结尾

哲理式结尾，即在结尾用富含哲理的语句，总结全文，升华主旨，并给人以启发。其一般用于引申文意，起到“言已尽而意无穷”的效果，使文章的中心更突出。同学们平常可以积累一些富含哲理的段落或句子，若将之移用到文章的结尾，不仅能深化主题，而且能启人深思，给读者以有益的启迪。

【参考范文】

When Mrs.Meredith heard of the idea， she thought it was a good one，too. Then Mrs. Meredith searched the Internet and ordered a household popcorn machine. After that， Mrs. Meredith together with her three children paid another visit to the family and told them about the popcorn plan. Needless to say， the family were deeply moved， especially Bernard who could sell popcorn to make money for his family. A few days later， a popcorn machine was delivered to Mrs. Meredith doorstep. And it wasnt long before they got the hang of using the machine to make popcorn.

With everything ready， Bernard started out on his new business. Although it was a hard time and things were tight for everyone， Bernards business turned out quite well. He carried popcorn on his small bike， going from door to door to sell it. People were surprised to see this little poorly-dressed boy selling popcorn at their doors， but eventually almost of them could buy one bag or two.It is love that make the world go round， just as a saying goes，“the fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose.”

【解析】该篇范文在构思情节时步步推进。第一段在所给的句子后展开构思，就如何帮助Bernard进行写作，Mrs. Meredith在网上预订了制作爆米花的机器，并告知了Bernard一家人，作者用deeply moved描写了这一家人的感动。第二段描述了Bernard挨家卖爆米花的情形，而且其他人得知这个情况后，都纷纷解囊购买爆米花来帮助他。最后作者以哲理句“是爱使世界运转，赠人玫瑰，手有余香”结尾，升华主题，点明“只要有爱，世界就会美好”的主题。

【哲理式结尾佳句积累】

1. Man is not made for defeat. A man can be destroyed but not defeated.

人不是为失败而生的。人可以毁灭，但不能被打败。

2.The pessimist sees difficulty in every opportunity. The optimist sees opportunity in every difficulty.

悲观主义者在每个机会里看到困难，乐观主义者在每个困难那里看到机会。

3. Be thankful for what you have; youll end up having more. If you concentrate on what you don't have， youll never， ever have enough.

感激你所拥有的，最终你会得到更多。如果你总是对那些没有得到的东西耿耿于怀，那么你永远也不会满足。

4. The best way to defeat your fear is to face your fear head-on.

克服恐惧最好的方法是迎面直击。

5. Never underestimate yourself， for you have no idea what you are capable of.

永远不要低估自己，因为你不知道你的能力所限。

二、以景结情式结尾

好的文章首先要给读者以美的享受和熏陶。在文章发展的过程中，戛然而止，转为写景，以景代情，结束文章，使文章有“此处无情胜有情”的效果。

在寫景结尾时，同学们要选择具有美感的景物，在情景交融中回味文意，体会文章主旨。景物应简洁疏朗，结尾写景抓住一两个意象即可，景物过多显得杂乱，冲淡了景物描写的作用，难以表现景物中蕴含的情感，忌简单罗列。

【参考范文】

When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea， she thought it was a good one， too. Then she said， “you may send him every Saturday morning， if you will pop the corn for him yourselves. John， will you agree to take charge of the work？” “Indeed， I will，” replied John， and he kept his word. Very soon the children were busy popping the corn， while their mother went out to buy the paper bags. When she came back， she brought Bernard with her. The corn was all popped， the paper bags filled， and arranged in the basket when Bernard arrived.

In a short time， he started out on his new business. And much sooner than could be expected， he returned with an empty basket. Never had he earned so much money before in his life. When he found that it was all to be his， he was so delighted that he could hardly speak， but his bright smiling face spoke for him. Every day he had at least fifty cents to take home， and often more. One night， he went home with some food bought for his family. Gentle breeze wiping his face， a sudden happiness and warmth just hit him.

【解析】分析文章可知，续写部分主要为Mrs. Meredith是如何帮助Bernard的以及在她的帮助下Bernard的生活有所改善。根据所给的首句，第二段主要描述Bernard如何努力地卖爆米花。结果当然是好的，Bernard应该感到高兴，因为他的生意可以改善一家人的生活。该篇文章的结尾由前面Bernard的感受而来，以情结景，情景交融，Gentle breeze这一意象充分表达了Bernard的喜悦与感恩之情，令人回味无穷。

【以景结情式结尾佳句】

1. No matter how cold the winter was， all that they could feel now was the surpassing warmth.

无论冬天多么寒冷，他们现在感受到的都是扑面而来的温暖。

2. Everything went smoothly and quietly， so in the dark night， a boy was reading while his mother was eating， snows heavy outside though， it just couldnt stop the warmth filling up the whole room.

一切都进行得顺利而安静，因此在黑暗的夜晚，一位男孩在读书的同时，他的母亲在吃饭。尽管外面下着大雪，但也阻挡不了整个房间弥漫的温暖。

3. I believe in full blossom， Grandmas sitting peacefully in the sun， every flower carrying her previously hope， with Grandpa beside her， giggling like a child.

我相信盛开的花朵，奶奶安详地坐在阳光下，每一朵花都带着她以前的希望。爷爷在她身边，咯咯地笑着，像个孩子。

4. The wind murmured in the trees and the sunlight flooded in through the window， warming the whole room， as if freezing ice was melted.

风在树上低语，阳光透过整个房间照射进来，冰冻的冰好像融化了。

5. In the heavy snow， passion and love burnt as they hugged and smiled.

在大雪中，当他们拥抱并微笑时，激情和爱在燃烧。

三、自然式结尾

自然结尾很容易，事情记叙完了，结果也来了，文章也就结束了，这就是自然式结尾。自然式结尾在把内容表达完了之后，自然而然地收束全文，而不去设计蕴意深刻的哲理语句。

这样的结尾显得单纯明快、朴素无华。但讲究“自然”并不意味马虎草率，而是顺着文章发展的自然趋势结束全局。有的时候虽然自然式结尾平淡无奇，但回味无穷，给读者留有思考的空间。自然式结尾简单、自然，使文章的结构显得十分完整。作为读后续写的文章，常常不一定含有某种深刻的道理，这时只要将故事补充完整就足够了。

【参考范文】

When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea， she thought it was a good one， too. So， they went to the local supermarket together. They bought a bag of corn and some special bags for popcorn. When they got home， they made a lot of popcorn and put it in the special bags. With the popcorn， they went to Bernards home. They told Bernard how to sell the popcorn. Bernard and his parents were very grateful. And the Meredith family also felt very happy to help this family.

With everything ready， Bernard started out on his new business. He took the popcorn around to the houses and sold all his popcorn. He earned a lot of money. Then， he wanted to be self-dependent. Therefore， he asked Mrs. Meredith to teach him how to make popcorn. After that， not only did he sell popcorn， but he also added cream and salt to the popcorn to make it taste better. Bernard grew up to be a remarkable man. He never forgot Mrs. Merediths help. He and his family have lived a happy life ever since.

【解析】这段续写紧扣原文，按故事发展的主线进行叙述。第一段介绍了Mrs. Meredith如何制作爆米花并装袋送给Bernard的过程，也涉及了Bernard的感激之情;第二段讲述了之后的发展，Bernard挣了很多钱，然后独立出来，请Mrs. Meredith教他制作爆米花，并进行了改良。根据故事发展的趋势，那么最后自然的结尾应该是Bernard和家人过着幸福的生活，同时他也不会忘记Mrs. Meredith对他的帮助.

四、对话式结尾

对话式结尾指文章以对话结束，此对话的功能包括：紧扣主线、意味深长、反映人物心理、揭示谜底、首尾呼应等。对话式结尾有时伴有相应的动作收尾，因为说完话总会有肢体动作伴随。对话式结尾有时意味深长，值得回味，留有空白给读者思考与感悟。使用这种结尾的前提是文章立意佳，否则就会弄巧成拙。还是以2020年新高考全国卷I（山东卷）的读后续写为例。

【参考范文】

When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea， she thought it was a good one， too. When the three siblings called on Bernard and shared the ‘big project with the poorboy， Bernards face lit up but quickly his excitement faded. “Thank you for your big box of corn， but I dont have a single penny to buy popcorn and paper bags.” Bernard sighed heavily. Smiling slyly， John produced 50 dollars， which was contributed together by Clara and Harry. Excitement returned to Bernards face as he murmured a sincere thank you with a trembling voice.

With everything ready， Bernard started out on his new business. On the first day he was so nervous that he could barely peddle the popcorns to the people in the street. Thinking of his mother and father， he told himself， “Bernard， you can do it！”. Then he shouted， “Come and taste my popcorns！ Delicious and crispy！” Slowly people around were attracted by this little popcorn boy and he earned more money than expected. Hearing the good news， Mrs. Merediths said to her children， “Done！ The twentieth. Next Ill help my neighbour Jenny make handicrafts. ”

【解析】這篇续写紧扣文章主题，续写顺接故事的发展线索。第一段描写的是解决钱的问题，Mrs. Meredith和几个孩子凑了一些钱捐给Bernard，这让他很感动，也很兴奋。第二段描述Bernard做生意的情况，从开始的紧张，到后来慢慢变好，并挣了很多钱。但结尾作者话锋一转，用Mrs. Meredith说给孩子们的话表达了她的自豪——已经帮助了二十个人，还要继续帮助其他人，这也与文章的前两段首尾呼应，暗示了当时的社会形势以及Mrs. Meredith的乐于助人，而且这个对话式的结尾也给读者对于后面故事的发展留下了想象的空间。

总之，读后续写的结尾非常重要，好的结尾可以起到“画龙点睛”的作用，既揭示故事的结局，又呼应前文的伏笔，点明主旨，深化主题，让人掩卷长思，回味悠长。