2017年12月大学英语四级考试作文评析（一）

贾从永

Directions：For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on how to best handle the relationship between parents and children. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

2017年12月大学英语四级考试的三道作文试题属于解决问题型作文，这种类型作文题目一般是how to...，即要求考生阐述如何解决某个问题。此类型作文议论的成分不多，更接近于说明文。比如，本题请考生阐述如何处理（handle）家长与孩子之间的关系。既然是handle，那就是说如今家长和孩子之间的关系存在一些问题，需要提出一些应对之策。所以，本文的重点是列举出一些改善亲子关系的方法。

本文宜写成三个段落。引言段指出积极的亲子关系对孩子的身心健康非常重要，或指出如今家长和孩子的关系出现了一些问题，然后指出改善亲子关系需要家长和孩子的共同努力。主体段阐述改善亲子关系的种种方法，这是文章的重心。我们在引言段中已经指出改善亲子关系需要双方的共同努力，所以主体不妨从两个方面展开阐述：一方面，家长应该主动改善与孩子的关系，家长应该从繁忙的工作中抽出时间陪伴孩子，让孩子感受到家长的关心和重视;另一方面，孩子也可以采取一些行动来改善与家长的关系，比如，孩子可以在特殊的日子送给家长一件礼物或者经常帮助家长做家务等，这能够让家长知道孩子对家长心存感激。本文可以用预测法结尾：虽然健康的亲子关系也难免有争执，但只要家长和孩子共同努力，一定能够解决分歧，享受一起度过的时光。下面请看范文：

As is known to all， a positive parent-child relationship is conducive to the physical and mental growth of children. However， maintaining a healthy parent-child bond needs the effort of both parties.

Parents should take the initiative to improve their relationship with the children. Of paramount importance is spending quality time with their children， however tight their schedule is. For instance， they can eat meals together， go to sporting events together or watch their children’s favorite TV show together. This can go a long way to making their children feel safe and loved. Children， on the other hand， should let their parents know they are appreciative of what their parents have done for them. For example， they can give their parents a gift on some special day or help with housework on a regular basis.

No healthy parent-child relationship is without conflict. But as long as parents and children make a concerted effort， they can resolve the conflict and enjoy their time together. （162 words）

語言亮点借鉴：

1. As is known to all， a positive parent-child relationship is conducive to the physical and mental growth of children. 众所周知，积极的亲子关系有助于孩子的身心成长。be conducive to 有助于，有益于。

2. However， maintaining a healthy parent-child bond needs the effort of both parties. 然而，保持健康的亲子关系需要双方的共同努力。

3. Parents should take the initiative to improve their relationship with the children. 家长应主动改善与孩子的关系。take the initiative to do sth 主动做某事。

4. Of paramount importance is spending quality time with the children， however tight their schedule is. 最重要的是和孩子一起度过宝贵时光，无论他们的日程安排有多么紧。of paramount importance 最重要的。这个介词短语在句中作表语，放在句首是为了强调。quality time 优质时间，宝贵时光。

5. This can go a long way to making their children feel safe and loved. 这大大有助于让孩子感到安全和被爱。go a long way to/towards doing sth 大大有助于做某事。

6. Children， on the other hand， should let their parents know they are appreciative of what their parents have done for them. 另一方面，孩子应该让父母知道自己对父母为他们所做的一切心存感激。be appreciative of 感激，感谢。

7. But as long as parents and children make a concerted effort， they can resolve the conflict and enjoy their time together. 但是只要家长和孩子共同努力，他们就能够解决分歧，享受共同度过的时光。make a concerted effort 共同努力。