I think I can!
2018-09-07江苏徐州七中彭向梅
江苏徐州七中 彭向梅
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本刊所有文章中注释的词汇均为非课标词汇,无须记忆与理解;在文后注释的词汇为课标词汇,建议同学们将后者整理为词汇掌中宝,以便随带随记。
Step 1感知·阅读导航
话题导入
当凯莉在蜿蜒的乡村小道开着小卡车转向狭窄的小桥时,意外的坑洞让卡车翻滚得四脚朝天。凯莉在血泊中被破碎的车门压得动弹不得,几乎昏迷。小卡车里,原本熟睡的5岁孩子猛然惊醒,在这生死关头,他是否能改变一切?从这个5岁的孩子身上,我们能学到什么呢?让我们一起开启阅读时光,感受“I think I can!”中生死一线的故事。
全文519词,难度中等,建议用时为9分钟。
阅读立意
1.通过研读标题,预测文章的发展;
2.借助思维导图抓住人物关系,完成文章大意的获取;
3.深入分析人物分别发生了什么,体会、领悟细节的写作手法,推测故事的发展趋势;
4.分析故事的结果,借助相似话题文章的续写,完成读写整合之读后续写的实战练习;
5.对比赏析相同标题、诗歌的内涵,完成阅读素养的构建。
Rocky Lyons,the son of New York Jets defensive end Marty Lyons,was five years old when his mother Kelly was driving through rural Alabama.He was asleep on the front seat of their pickup truck,with his feet resting on her leg.
As his mom drove carefully down thewindingtwo-lane country road,she turned onto a narrow bridge.As she did,the truck hit a large rough hole andslidoff the road,and the right front wheelgot stuckin a rut(车辙).Fearing the truck wouldtip over,she attempted to jerk(猛拉)it back up onto the road bypressinghard on the gas pedal(油门) andspinningthe steering wheel (方向盘)to the left.But Rocky's footgot caughtbetween her leg and the steering wheel and shelost control ofthe truck.
The truck turned over and over down a 20-foot ravine(沟壑).When it hit bottom,Rocky woke up.“What happened,Mama?” he asked.“Our wheels arepointingtoward the sky.”
Kelly,blinded by blood,was in a terrible condition andpinnedagainst thecrusheddoor.“I'll get you out,Mama,”announced Rocky,who had miraculously escaped injury.He moved out from under Kelly,slid through the open window and tried topullhis motherout.But she didn't move.“Just let me sleep! ”begged Kelly,who wasdrifting inand out ofconsciousness.“No,Mama,” Rockyinsisted. “You can't go to sleep!”
Rocky wriggled(蠕动)back into the truck and managed topushKellyout ofthe wreckage (残骸).He then told her he'd climb up to the road and stop a car to get help.Fearing that no one would be able to see her little boy in the dark,Kelly refused to let him go alone.Instead they slowlycrept upthe embankment(路堤),with Rocky using his 40-pound frame to push his 104-pound mother.Theycrawledinches at a time.The pain was so great that Kelly wanted to give up,but Rocky wouldn't let her.
Tourgehis motheron,Rocky told her to think about that Little Train,the one in the classic children's story.The little engine that could,which managed toget up a steep mountain.Toremindher,Rocky kept repeating hisversionofthe story'sinspirationalphrase:“I know you can,I know you can...”
When they finally reached the road,Rocky was able to see his mother's torn face clearly for the first time.Hebroke into tears.Waving his arms andpleading,“Stop!Please stop!”the boy hailed (招手叫停)a truck.“Get my mama to a hospital,” he begged the driver.
It took 8 hours to rebuild Kelly's face.She looks quite different today—“I used to have a straight long nose,thin lips and high cheekbones;now I've got a pug nose(扁鼻),flat cheeks and much bigger lips”—but shehas few visible scarsand hasrecovered from her injuries.
Rocky's heroics were big news.But the brave and determined youngster insisted he didn't do anything extraordinary.“It's not like I wanted it to happen,”he explained.“ just did what anyone would have done.”his mother said,“If it weren't for Rocky,I'd have bled to death.”
译文助读
洛基·里昂兹是纽约空军喷射机防卫队队员马丁·里昂兹的儿子。洛基5岁时,有天和母亲凯莉开着小货车行经阿拉巴马州的乡间小道上。他悠闲地睡在前座,脚则舒服地放在凯莉的大腿上。
凯莉小心地将小货车从蜿蜒的双车道的乡村小路面转向狭窄的小桥。没想到路上有个坑洞,使整辆车滑出路面,向路边冲出,右前轮陷入车辙。由于害怕整个车子翻覆,凯莉赶紧用力踩油门踏板,把方向盘转向左边,试图把车子拉回路上。但是事与愿违,洛基的脚被卡在凯莉的腿和方向盘之间。她失去了对车子的控制。
卡车翻倒在一个20英尺的峡谷。当它撞到底部时,洛基醒来了。“妈咪,发生什么事了?”他问。“车子怎么四脚朝天了?”
凯莉满脸是血,整个人被支离破碎的车门压得动弹不得。而洛基则奇迹般地毫发未伤,他嚷着:“妈咪,我会带你出去。”他从凯莉的下面爬了出来,通过车窗离开了小货车,并尝试着将母亲拉出车子,但凯莉一动也不动。凯莉在昏昏沉沉中只是哀求道:“让我睡一下吧!”洛基则大声喊叫:“妈咪,你要坚持住,千万别睡着啊!”
洛基又钻进了小货车,并成功将凯莉推出车子的残骸。他又告诉凯莉,他将爬到马路上去拦车子求救。由于担心在黑暗中没有人会看到这么小的男孩,凯莉拒绝让洛基单独前往。母子两人只好慢慢地爬上路堤,洛基用瘦小的身躯将两倍多重的母亲往上推。就这样一寸一寸犹如蜗牛爬行。凯莉感到非常疼痛,几乎要放弃希望,但洛基始终鼓舞着她。
为了鼓励凯莉,洛基告诉妈妈想想《小火车》的故事。其实这是个典型的童话故事,它叙述小火车虽然只有小小引擎,却能爬上陡峭的山头。为了提醒凯莉振作起来,洛基则重复故事中提到的“我相信你能做到,我相信你能……”。
他们终于爬到了路边,那时,洛基才有亮光看清母亲受重创的脸。他开始泪流满面,挥舞着双手,对着驶过的货车呼喊:“停下来,请停下来! ”向司机恳求着:“请带我妈咪到医院。”
整合凯莉的脸总共花了 8个小时,她如今看起来和以往大不相同。过去她有笔直的鼻子,薄薄的嘴唇以及高高的颧骨,现在则是扁鼻、塌颊、阔嘴。但脸上留下鲜有可见的伤疤,而且已经痊愈。
洛基的英勇事迹成了大新闻。但这个有胆识的勇敢的小男孩很谦虚地认为自己没有做什么事。他说:“这一切都在意料之外,我只是做了该做的事,任何人在当时都会那样做的。”凯莉则感动地说:“如果不是洛基,我可能早就因流血过多而死了。”
Step 2 实践·文本解读
阅读扫障
Ⅰ.熟词生义
文中词条 文中含义 引申含义 生义例句press(Para.2)(被)压;挤;推;施加压力 报章杂志;报刊;印刷 The story was reported in the press and on television.这件事已在报刊和电视上报道了。point(Para.3) 对着;朝向 论点;观点;见解 She made several interesting points in the article.她在文章中提出了几个有趣的观点。pin(Para.4)使动弹不得;按住;钳住 (有别针的)徽章He supports the group and wears its pin on his lapel.他支持这个团体,并在翻领上佩戴它的徽章。crush(Para.4)压坏;压伤;挤压变形(狭小空间中)拥挤的人群I couldn't find a way through the crush.人太挤,我挤不过去。
Ⅱ.热词积累
Vocabulary
1.winding adj.having a curving and twisting shape曲折的;弯曲的;蜿蜒的
2.slide (slid,slid)v.to move easily over a smooth or wet surface;to make sth move in this way (使)滑行;滑动
3.spin v.to turn round and round quickly;to make sth do this(使)快速旋转
4.miraculouslyadv.completelyunexpectedlyand very luckily奇迹般地;不可思议地;不平凡地
5.consciousness n.the state of being able to use your senses and mental powers to understand what is happening清醒状态;知觉
6.insist v.to demand that sth happens or that sb agrees to do sth坚决要求;坚持
7.crawl v.to move forward on your hands and knees,with your body close to the ground爬;爬行;匍匐行进
8.remind v.to help sb remember sth,especially sth important that they must do提醒;使想起
9.version n.a description of an event from the position of a particular person or group of people(从不同角度的)说法;描述
10.inspirational adj.making you feel hopeful or encouraged鼓舞人心的
11.plead v.to ask sb for sth in a very strong and serious way乞求;恳求
Phrases
1.get stuck卡住;被困住
2.tip over(使)翻倒
3.get caught被抓住
4.lose control of失去对……的控制
5.pull sb out把某人拉出来
6.drift in不知不觉陷入
7.push sb out of推开某人
8.creep up慢慢爬上
9.urge sb on鼓励;激励;为……加油
10.get up a steep mountain爬上陡峭的山
11.break into tears突然哭起来
12.have few visible scars鲜有可见的伤疤
13.recover from one’s injuries从某人的伤中恢复过来
Ⅲ.句型积累
Fearing that no one would be able to see her little boy in the dark,Kelly refused to let him go alone.由于担心在黑暗中没有人会看到这么小的男孩,凯莉拒绝让洛基单独前往。
此句中Fearing作原因状语,和主句主语Kelly是逻辑上的主谓关系,用v-ing表示主动,that引导宾语从句。另外,还需注意动词v-ing形式作状语时,其逻辑主语必须与句子的主语一致,如果主语不一致,可给从句加上主语,变成主从复合句。
句式仿写
立意呈现
Ⅰ.Fast reading
Look at the title,can you complete it after you read the whole passage?
Ⅱ.Detailed reading
Understand the main idea by analyzing the relationship of the main characters.
1.Complete the form after reading the passage quickly.One word is required for one blank.
2.What do you think of the title now?
I believe Rocky can ________________________.
【点石成金】阅读始于浏览并理解标题。本文的标题I think I can具有较强的开放性。基于标题,我们在阅读时应思考以下三个基本问题:
What does “I” refer to in the passage?
What can “I” do according to the passage?
What are the characteristics of “I” according to the title?
带着问题阅读,通过阅读补全标题,是快速理解文章大意的最佳途径之一。本文中人物关系简单——母与子;情节聚焦——生死一线之际儿子救母亲。通过利用思维导图,我们可以直观简洁地呈现出记叙文的六个要素,快速理清人物关系,抓住文章主旨大意,并完成对标题隐含信息的挖掘。
Ⅲ.Deep reading
Get the details and have a good understanding of the plot.
1.What happened to the mother?Complete the event list.
2.What happened to the son?Rearrange the order of the story.
A.When it hit bottom,Rocky woke up.“What happened,Mama?” he asked. “Our wheels are pointing toward the sky.”
B.He was asleep on the front seat of their pickup truck.
C.He moved out from under Kelly,slid through the open window and tried to pull his mother out.
D.“I'll get you out,Mama,” announced Rocky,who had miraculously escaped injury.
E.Rocky wriggled back into the truck and managed to push Kelly out of the wreckage.
F.Rocky used his 40-pound frame to push his 104-pound mother.
G.“No,Mama,” Rocky insisted. “You can't go to sleep!”
H.The pain was so great that Kelly wanted to give up,but Rocky kept repeating his version of the story's inspirational phrase to urge his mother on.
I.With tears in his eyes,waving his arms and pleading,“Stop!Please stop! ”the boy begged the driver to send his mother to the hospital.
【点石成金】理解文章情节中的细节,关键在于梳理母亲和儿子的事件线。通过阅读可以得出结论,母亲的事件线更依赖于动词的使用,说明事件的紧急性。而发生在儿子身上的,我们可以更多地关注事件顺序,体会紧急情况下5岁孩子的冷静和理智处理紧急事件的果断。这样的阅读技巧,同样可以运用到相似话题和体裁的文章中,也为后面读后续写梳理事件线打下读的基础。
Ⅳ.Evaluating Reading
Read the concluding paragraph and answer the question.
1.Is it a surprising ending?Why?
2.Do you think it’s a good concluding paragraph?Please offer your reason whether you have a better idea or not.
【点石成金】从人物关系分析到事件线发展的分析,结尾部分已经是意料之中。而同学们也会发现,结尾除了符合事件发展逻辑外,还是人物性格发展的必然结果。所以最后一段的对话,也需要品味。儿子觉得没做什么,母亲却一语道破儿子生死一线的相助,再次加深了人物关系,体现母子亲情、深情。读后续写,也可以从事件线和情感线续写。
Step 3 运用·读写整合
Ⅰ.凸显文本特点
此篇文章的主要大意为:5岁孩子在生死关头,鼓励妈妈渡过人生难关。通过阅读可知,作者对文章情节和人物描述的处理采用了不同的写作手法。在阅读中,抓人物描述、抓情节发展、抓读前预测和推测最后结尾,是极为重要的。
Ⅱ.读写任务
语篇缩写
读写思考过程呈现
主题概括
Topic sentence:It's a moving story about a mother and a son.
分写角色一
Asthemother drovedownthe winding country road,she lost control of the truck and was pinned against the door.
分写角色二
Rocky Lyons,5 years old,helped,inspired and saved his mother eventually.
总结点题
Concluding sentence:It’s the spirit of the brave and determined youngster that teaches us a lesson.
【点石成金】语篇缩写练习是培养阅读技能,提高概述能力的最好的练习方式之一。除了之前介绍的六要素概括法外,还可以进行总-分-总写作,即topic sentence+supporting sentences+concluding sentence。具体为主题概括,分写角色,总结点题。在此处的写作过程中,连句成篇即可。
Ⅲ.写作实践——读后续写
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
Rich and Anthony spotted something ahead at the same moment.
“What's that up there?” asked the engineer.Anthony didn't answer.Staring attentively,he was trying to identify the curious shape on the track ahead.A box?Old rags?
Suddenly both men realized what it was.“Kids on the track!”
Anthony jumped through the cab door onto a narrow running board six feet above the wheels and raced to the front of the train.Climbing quickly down a steel ladder,he paused at the bottom.
Now he could clearly see the two little children.They were sitting alongside the rail.Anthony waved wildly and shouted,“Get away!Get away! ”
Absorbed in play,Todd and Scott did not hear the train.Finally,as the sound became thunderous,Scott looked up and froze.
Though the train was slowing,Anthony knew it was still going faster than he could run.So he forced himself to wait until he would be close enough to jump off and grab the boys.With perhaps ten feet left between them and the sharp-edged snowplow blade at the front of the train,Anthony jumped forward from the ladder.Landing on the loose,fist-size stones alongside the track,he had to struggle to keep his balance.In two giant steps he almost reached the children.They stared up at him in wide-eyed shock.Anthony,throwing his body into air,flew toward them.
The unending blast(爆炸)of the train horn (喇叭 ) struck children’s mother Kate like a hammer blow.“The boys! ”she cried,and raced out the door.They were gone!
“The track,” she thought.“I must get to the track! ”
Part of the train then punched(痛击)into the back of Anthony's work jacket,tearing the nylon fabric.Still,Anthony managed to pull Scott completely under him.
He's dead,Anthony thought.He felt unhappiness with horror.Burying his face in the stones,he pushed downward on the two boys with all his strength as the train passed inches above them.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para.1:
The first person Kate saw when she reached the halted(停止的)train was Todd.
Para.2:
Reporters later asked Anthony if he had hesitated before risking his life.
【点石成金】读后续写是浙江省进入高考综合改革后引入的新题型,也是近期内其他省份即将陆续采用的题型。该题型主要考查学生的思维能力及语篇构思能力。在阅读中抓人物关系、抓事件发展线,在此基础上学会续写事件结局,是读后续写平日训练的有效方法之一。
【读后续写过程呈现】
1.抓人物关系
(1)____and (2)____spotted something ahead at the same time.
(3)___pushed downward on the two boys with all his strength.
Children’s mother(4)____suddenly found that her Children were(5)___.(6)___and(7)___did not hear the(8)___
Kids were on the(9)___!
2.快读情节描述
Take notes to understand the plot and the event list of Anthony better.
(1)虽然火车在减速,安东尼知道火车仍然跑得比他快。
Though the train was slowing,Anthony knew
______________________________________.
(2)于是,他强迫自己等到离他们足够近的地方跳下去,再抓住孩子们。
So he forced himself to wait until he would be close enough to________________________.
(3)在他们与火车前面的锋利雪犁刃之间仅剩十英尺时,安东尼从梯子上跳下来。
With perhaps ten feet left between them and the sharp-edged snowplow blade at the front of the train,Anthony___________________________________________________________________________________.
(4)在跑道旁边的松散的拳头大小的石头上着陆。他不得不努力保持平衡。
Landing on the loose,fist-size stones alongside the track,he had to __________________________.
(5)在两个巨大的台阶上,他差点够到孩子们。
In two giant steps he almost_______________.
(6)安东尼一跃腾空跳起,扑向他们。
Anthony,_________________,flew toward them.
(7)尽管如此,安东尼还是设法把斯科特完全拉到了他的下面。
Still,Anthony managed to _________________.3.写作思维建构
从提示句预测可能结果,运用I think I can的分写角色思维方法,来展开对结尾的预测。
Para.1:The first person Kate saw when she reached the halted train was Todd.
(1)What’s the function of Kate?
(2)What would happen to Todd and Scott?(3)What would happen to Anthony?
(4)What would Anthony respond on the spot?
(5)Was it necessary for the doctor to check them and make a simple diagnosis (诊断)?
从第二步骤的情节事件线和Anthony动作行为分析推测他处理危机事件时的心理活动。
Para.2:Reporters later asked Anthony if he had hesitated before risking his life.
Based on the plot and the event list of Anthony,what would his thought be at that emergency?
What made his brave action?4.读写归纳
读的方法可以作用于写的过程。读为写服务,怎么读就怎么写。如果同学们能积累这样的阅读和写作方法,那么读后续写可以在平日阅读写作中化难为易。
译文助读
里奇和安东尼同时发现了前方有一些东西。
“前方是什么?”工程师问。安东尼没有回答。他目不转睛地盯着,试图辨认前面轨道上的奇怪的形状。一个盒子?旧破布?
突然,两个人都意识到了那是什么。“孩子们在轨道上!”
安东尼从驾驶室的门跳到了离车轮六英尺高的狭窄的甲板上,跑到了火车的前面。他迅速爬下一架钢梯,停在梯子底部。
现在他可以清楚地看到那两个小孩了。他们坐在轨道旁边。安东尼疯狂地挥手并喊道:“走开!走开!”
陶德和斯科特全神贯注地玩着,没有听到火车的声音。最后,当声音变得雷鸣般的时候,斯科特抬起头,愣住了。
虽然火车在减速,但安东尼知道火车仍然跑得比他快。于是,他强迫自己等到离他们足够近的地方跳下去,再抓住孩子们。在他们与火车前面的锋利雪犁刃之间仅剩十英尺时,安东尼从梯子上跳了下来。跳在了铁轨旁边的松散的拳头大小的石头上,他不得不努力保持他的平衡。在两个巨大的台阶上,他差点够到孩子们。他们睁大眼睛瞪着他。安东尼一跃而起,飞扑过去。
火车号角的不断的隆隆声像锤子一样敲打着孩子们的母亲凯特。“孩子们!”她叫道,然后跑出了门。看不到孩子们!
她想:“那条铁道。我必须去铁道!”
火车的一部分从安东尼的工作服的后面一掠而过,撕开了尼龙织物。尽管如此,但安东尼还是设法把斯科特完全拉到了他的下面。
他死了,安东尼想。他因恐惧而感到绝望。他把脸埋在石头里,用他的力气把两个男孩推下去,火车从距离他们只有几英寸的地方,飞驰而过。
Step 4 提升·素养建构
【诗歌欣赏】
同样的标题,还有一首耳熟能详脍炙人口的诗歌,快快背诵一下吧。
I Think I Can
If you think you are beaten,you are;
If you think you dare not,you don't;
If you want to win but think you can't;
It's almost a cinch(必然发生的事)you won't.
If you think you'll lose,you're lost;
For out of the world we find
Success begins with a fellow's will;
It's all in a state of mind.
Life's battles don't always go
To the stronger and faster man,
But sooner or later the man who wins
Is the man who thinks he can.
如果你认为你败了,那你就一败涂地;
如果你认为你不敢,那你就会退缩畏惧;
如果你想赢但是认为你不能;
那么毫无疑问你就会失利。
如果你认为你输了,你就输了;
因为我们发现人世间
成功从一个人的意志开始;
成功是一种心态。
生活之战,
胜利并非总是属于更强和更快的人,
胜利者终究是
认为自己能行的人。
诗人以排比和反复咏叹的句式,从不同层面强调了意志和信念对于成功的重要性,这是诗歌常用表现手法,简短轻快,和记叙文事件的描述阅读,是不同感官的美的享受。同样的主题和表现手法,极具代表性的是《疯狂动物城》的主题曲Try everything。
……
Look at how far you've come坚持了多久
you filled your heart with love
看看满怀着爱的你
Baby you've done enough that cut your breath你已经受够了白费力气
Don't beat yourself up don't need to run so fast请不要自暴自弃,也不必太快抽离
Sometimes we come last but we did our best
有时我们终能实现梦想,只要我们竭尽全力
I won'give up nor I won't give in
我绝不会屈服,绝不会放弃
……
【学习小结】
I think I can!希望能带给你不同的世界。无论是让人惊叹的5岁男孩果断勇敢的救母之举,还是火车呼啸生死间陌生人的相救,抑或是诗歌的隽永萦绕,相信自己可以,我想你会是不一样的烟火。