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【栏目要求】

1.将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩; 2.在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号;3.根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由; 4.给学生习作点评lt;优点与不足gt;;5.请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。

投稿邮箱：zxsyy2007@163.com或whzxsyy@163.com

来稿请寄：430079华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》杂志社 收

本期点评名师

姜经志男，中学英语高级教师、省级骨干教师、淮北市优秀教师、中国外语学习学研究会会员，《学英语》《英语周报》特约编辑；多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇，并有多篇论文获奖；曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》《英语奥林匹克》《新目标英语八年级暑假作业》，参与编辑《高中英语知识点反馈与阅读》《初中英语题典大全》《21世纪英语学习指南》《初中英语新作文》等；曾辅导学生30余人次在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。

My Birthday

Today is Friday.It is my thirteen①birthday.I got up very early in the morning and put on my new clothes happily.My parents bought me the new clothes for②my birthday present.I went to school earlier than before.I invited many classmates come③to my birthday party in the evening.

Evening came at last.Many of my classmates came to my home.They bought me lots of beautiful present④.They all said,“Happy birthday to you! ”We all sang birthday songs happily.Then my parents took out a big birthday cake and said to me,“Happy birthday!We love you forever!”

At the end of the party,we eated⑤the birthday cake and some other delicious food.How happy I was!

安徽省濉溪县百善中心学校七（1）班 赵毅

1.优点:

这是一篇典型的记叙文；时间、地点、人物、事件等要素齐全，表达清晰，让人一目了然；时态运用准确。

2.需要修改的地方：

①thirteen应改为thirteenth。此处应用序数词thirteenth，意为“第十三”。

②for应改为as。表示“作为”，此处应用as。

③come应改为to come。表示“邀请某人去做某事”，应用invite sb.to do sth.。

④present应改为presents。此处应用名词的复数形式。

⑤eated应改为ate。eat的过去式是不规则变化，即ate。

3.评分：

按中考英语作文满分25分的标准，本文修改前可得22分。

【栏目要求】

1.将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩; 2.在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号;3.根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由; 4.给学生习作点评lt;优点与不足gt;;

5.请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。

投稿邮箱：zxsyy2007@163.com或whzxsyy@163.com

来稿请寄：430079华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》杂志社 收

本期点评名师

张超 男，河北省衡水市阜城县古城中学英语一级教师，市英语优秀教师，县骨干教师，从事英语教育教学工作多年。曾在《中学生英语》《学英语》《英语周报》《初中生周报》《中学生英语读写》《中学英语园地》《英语辅导》《校园英语》《中学生语数外》等省级以上报刊发表文章数百篇，并有多篇论文获奖；曾参与高中版教辅资料《天天向上》《三维方案》的编写工作；曾荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号；多次辅导学生在省、市和国家级英语竞赛中获奖。

A Letter to Sam

Dear Sam,

I’m so glad to tell you something about our school,one of the most well known schools in China.

Our school was founded in 1951.It lie①in the southeast of Hebei Province.It is famous in②its good quality in teaching.Now it has about 1,800 students who are working hard for our country.The number of teachers are③more than 100.The teachers teach very well and work hard to help the students.During the past 60 years,a great number of students have graduated from our school.Many of them have made great successes in their own field.We are all proud for④them.

I hope you’ll have a chance to visit our school in the near future.

Yours,

Zhang Qi

河北省阜城县古城中学八年级（3）班 张琪

1.优点：

本文覆盖了所有的提示要点，表达自然流畅，结构严谨。小作者在行文时有意识地使用了定语从句、宾语从句等一些较复杂的句子结构，句与句间使用了一些连词，使文章结构连贯，层次井然，体现了小作者扎实的写作功底。

2.需要修改的地方：

①lie应改为lies。因为句子主语是单数名词our school，谓语动词应用第三人称单数形式。

②in应改为for。be famous for是固定短语，意思是“以……而著名”。

③are应改为is。the number of...意为“……的数目”，作主语时，谓语动词要用单数形式。

④for改为of。be proud of...为固定短语，意为“因……而自豪”。

3.评分：

按中考英语作文满分20的评分标准，本文修改前可得18分。

曾为帅

善良

爱好：旅游、看书、听音乐、打篮球

座右铭：Towering genius disdains a beaten path.It seeks regions hitherto unexplored.

就读学校：湖北省武汉市江汉区一初慧泉中学金雅校区七年级（3）班

指导老师：周芸

Without You—ROY

To be honest,you are such a good person that gives me deep impression.When I first met you,you were taller than me.You are like a friendly brother to me.I cannot imagine if I had not met you,what would I have become.You are so handsome that you are popular in your class.You wear a pair of glasses.You look like a wise man who is very knowledge able.You have short straight hair so you look so candid.When I talk with you or discuss with you,although we have different opinions,every time you are right.

You help me a lot.I think we are always good friends.A famous saying goes,“A friend is a second self.”You are not me,but you know me more than I know myself.When I get into trouble,you always tell me to be confident.I still remember what you said.“Do not be so hard on yourself,and take care of yourself.”I cannot be without you.“You are my sunshine.”

出生日期：2004年10月10日

爱好：阅读、画画、书法

座右铭：人努力了不一定会成功，但放弃了就一定会失败。

就读学校：江苏省连云港市罗阳中学七（2）班

指导老师：陈传光

My Pets

I keep goldfish as pets.I like them very much.They are orange and have beautiful tails and fins.They like bubbling.I usually give them fish food once a day.When I go close to them,they will swim toward me and look excited.But I won’t feed them too much because it’s not good for them.Goldfish are so small and soft.I am always very careful not to pick them up with my hands.It is very important to keep the fish bowl clean.I usually clean the bowl twice a week.I’ll look after them till the end.

张智玉

善良

出生日期：2002年11月12日

爱好：画画

座右铭：虚心使人进步，骄傲使人落后。

就读学校班级：江苏省连云港市罗阳中学八（1）班

指导老师：陈传光

My First DIY Job

DIY is popular among young people.I did my first DIY job yesterday!

Last week,I bought some paint and two brushes online.After I got everything ready,I read the instructions.Then I started the job.At first,I painted the wall blue.It seemed a little boring.Then I had an idea.I painted a boat and some colourful fish on the blue wall.I was glad about my job.But the room got messy and I spent an hour tidying it up.

I was tired after the job.But I was also excited because I did an amazing job.

张腾

好学

出生日期：2002年2月27日

座右铭：一分耕耘，一分收获。

就读学校班级：河北省阜城县第三中学八年级（4）班指导老师：张超

A Letter to Zhang Jianmin

Dear Zhang Jianmin,

How time flies!You have been studying in London for nearly two months.Well,how’s everything going?

I’m glad to tell you that I’ll go to London to take part in an English speech contest in June.This is not only an honor,but also a great chance for me to improve myself.However,I have some trouble in collecting materials and using the language.I’ll be very thankful if you can give me a hand to solve the problems.After the contest,I’ll drop in at your school.Please wait for my call.

I’m looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Zhang Teng

Our New School Term

Everything is new in middle school—a new school,new classmates,new teachers,new subjects...But not everything is enjoyable in the new environment.Maybe you don’t know how to make new friends at school,you feel pressure from other students,or there are too many sub jects and you don’t know how to learn well.You may not be happy because of these problems.

Don’t worry.Everything is hard in the beginning.It is a big change from a primary school to a middle school.It’s OK to have problems.You can go to your parents and teachers for help.They’ll be very glad to help you.

Because there are more subjects to learn in middle school,you need to use your time wisely.It’s important and helpful.

Anyway,middle school is a new start in your life.Study hard,then you will be very successful.

我们的新学期

中学里的一切都是新的——新学校、新同学、新老师、新科目……但新环境中并非一切都让人快乐。也许你不知道在学校如何结交新朋友，你可能感受到了来自其他同学的压力，或有太多的科目，而你不知道如何学好这些科目。这些问题可能会让你开心不起来。

别担心，万事开头难。从小学到中学是一个很大的转折。遇到问题很正常。你可以向父母或老师寻求帮助。他们会很高兴帮助你。

在中学里你有很多课程要学，因此你需要合理利用时间。这很重要，对你有帮助。

总之，中学是你人生中一个崭新的开始。努力学习，你一定会成功的。