My Wonderful Day

李蕊

石继忠 男，1989年参加工作，中学高级教师、济宁市骨干教师、市级教学能手；在工作中，立足实际，认真搞好教学，创造性地开展学校的教育教学、教改科研工作，在教育这片田园里勤奋耕耘，积极探索，不断改进教学手段，吸收先进的教育理念，在多年的英语教学工作中，积累了丰富的教学经验，形成了自己独特的教学方法；从教以来一直担任初中毕业班的教学工作，在历年的中考中，所执教的班级都取得了优异的成绩，受到学校和社会各界的一致好评；曾先后在省级、国家级报刊发表论文一百多篇，现担任《英语周报》《英语辅导报》《学生英语报》《英语画刊》《英语园地》等多家报刊的特约编辑。

Its October 1st today， the National Day. I wanted to go out with my parents. Unfortunately， they were going to see some pieces of furniture. So I have to stay at home. In the① fact， I was now the real master of my house. I could do whatever I wanted to do. Its so wonderful. I opened the icebox and took out some delicious food. I had such a good appetite today than ever before. I began to eat as many② as possible. Then I turned on the TV and watched the basketball match. It was an exciting match and I was interested in it. After that I called Li Hua at 7221047 and said “Hello， dear friend. Shall we go and play football today？” He answered， “OK， I just want to invite you to play it， too. Lets go together.” We enjoyed ourselves for two hours in the open air.

After getting to③ home， I took a bath and hummed a classical song at the same time. Then I went to the kitchen and did the cooking for my family. My parents enjoyed the lunch very much and were very pleased with me.

I felt a little tired and went to bed. I fell asleep very soon and had a wonderful dream. In the dream， I could not helping saying， “How④ a wonderful day it is！”

1. 優点：

这是记叙生活中的一天的记叙文。整篇文章首尾呼应。文章清楚地记叙了国庆节这天的活动，围绕着一个中心“A Wonderful Day”展开。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①去掉the。in fact意为“事实上”。

②many改为much。as much as possible意为“尽可能多地”。

③去掉to。get home意为“到家”。

④how改为what。引导感叹句，后接名词时用what。

3. 评分：

按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得13分。