I’m Crazy About Cartoons
2017-08-04许晴
Do you like cartoons? I am crazy about cartoons because they are very interesting and cartoon music listens① really great. I have a great time when I watch the cartoon films.
When I was a child, my mother and my grandmother showed me some cartoon books. When I was four years old, I could watch cartoons on TV and② I didnt understand them at all. When I was eight years old, I could understand some of the words in the cartoons. So I could understand lots of animals and people in the cartoons. Now, I am crazy with③ cartoons. I read comics and watch cartoon films during my holidays. I like drawing. So I want to draw people in the cartoons. I think I can draw them good④.
1. 優点:
如今,喜爱动画的中学生越来越多,小作者许晴也不例外。她是一个动画迷,动画几乎一直陪伴着她的成长,陪她度过了一个美好的童年。小作者十分喜欢动画并想用画笔把动画人物记录下来。全文行文流畅、用词得当、思路清晰,是一篇不错的学生习作。
2. 需要修改的地方:
①listens改为sounds。此处是系表结构,sound是系动词,意为“听起来”,great是形容词做表语。
②and改为but。上下文是转折关系。
③with改为about。be crazy about意为“对……着迷”。
④good改为well。修饰动词draw应使用副词well。
3. 评分:
按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分20分的评分标准,本文修改前可得17分。