湖北卷短文写作一例

段永华

請根据以下提示，并结合具体事例，用英语写一篇短文。

When you take action， the boundaries of what you believe to be possible expand， which in turn gives you the ability to consider new possibilities.

注意：1. 无须写标题；

2. 除诗歌外，文体不限；

3. 内容必须结合你生活中的具体事例；

4. 文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；

5. 词数不少于120，如引用提示语则不计入总词数。

上题是一道典型的湖北卷短文写作题。从近年湖北卷的短文写作试题以及湖北高考英语考试说明看，2015年湖北卷短文写作的命题仍将保持传统的命题风格，即给出一段哲理性的英语名言警句类作为提示，要求考生围绕该提示的话题，结合事例展开阐述。

写好此类作文应该从下面几个方面着手：

1. 认真审题，弄清话题。

首先阅读写作素材，提炼写作话题，然后根据题目的要求，选取自己校园生活或学习中的一件事例，合理想象，设定要点和内容。此时同学们最好先列出一个简短的英语或汉语提纲，以免出现写作过程中忘记要点，不知道该如何继续写作的情况。

2. 分析事件背景，确定写作时态。

湖北卷的短文写作通常为记叙文为主，此时应该用一般过去时讲述自己或身边人的经历，而在发表议论时则应该用一般现在时。

3. 注意行文逻辑，妙用过渡词句。

在结合事例展开写作时，一定要使用一些过渡词句，以保证叙述的连贯。

让我们以本文开头的短文写作题为例，谈谈如何审题谋篇。

本篇写作的话题是“积极行动起来，我们才能实现人生的发展。”我们还是用三段式的篇章结构来布局：

1. 直接说明话题内容：我们只有投入实际行动才能实现我们的目标，并拓展我们的能力；

2. 结合自己的学习和生活来举例进行说明；

3. 讲述完事例后，再次回归主题，说明自己的感悟。

如何恰当地给文章开头和结尾一直是同学们的一大困扰。这就需要我们熟悉各种适用的句型，比如我们可以用类似这样的语句快速进入写作内容：

1. All through my years of school life， what I have learned is that... （话题）

2. In our daily life， its common that we may be faced with countless difficulties/choices. Its our attitude that determines whether we can make a difference in life.

3. Theres no denying （the fact） that for us school students， what counts most is that... （话题）.

4. Its universally acknowledged that encouragement is like warm and bright sunshine， which can cheer up the heart of anyone in low spirits.

结尾我们可以采用以下语句：

1. Therefore， it goes without saying that...

2. In conclusion， we have every reason to believe that only by... can we hope to... and achieve our goals.

3. My experience fully illustrates that what counts most is... if we are to overcome difficulties in life.

4. To sum up， its not our abilities but our choices that show what we truly are.

5. However hard times may get， hold your heads up and be strong； show them you are not as weak as they think.

现提供一篇范文供参考：

Through my years of school life， Ive come to realize the importance of taking specific action rather than just sitting there daydreaming or being scared by setbacks.

When still in primary school， looking at other students coming and going on their bikes made me jealous. I immediately set to action， asking my parents to buy me a bike. I began to practice. Though having suffered countless falls， I finally managed to keep my balance on it. You cant imagine how proud I felt！ More importantly， this experience accumulated my confidence that I can achieve anything as long as I worked hard enough. As it turned out， this belief has benefited me a lot in my life.

Indeed， it goes without saying that only when we take action can we make possible what we thought to be impossible， thus enabling us to make more progress.

點评 本篇习作对话题的理解准确，围绕话题展开有条理的叙述，使用了各种短语和句式，以及衔接上下文的过渡词语。

1. 开篇改造写作模板中的语句，用一个单句直接进入话题，使用了rather than， be scared by， setback等高级词汇；

2. 第二句使用了“when+介词短语”这个状语从句的省略形式，动名词短语作主语和“make+复合宾语”的使用使语句的表达十分有力度；

3. 为保证叙述的连贯和行文流畅，作者使用了more importantly作为过渡语，保证了文章的行文连贯和叙述的层次感，并在后面使用了that引导同位语从句，as long as引导状语从句等。

4. 最后一句用长句结束全文，将写作推向一个高潮，使用了写作模板中的语句“it goes without saying that+主语从句”，when引导状语从句，倒装句和现在分词作状语，这些都使本文成为一篇值得我们学习的考场佳作。

从近年湖北卷和湖北各地的高考模拟试卷看，话题都是围绕中学生的身心健康和日常生活来设置的，有些话题选自教材中的名人名言，有些话题来自网络。一般来说这些话题都与中学生的生活和成长息息相关，我们都觉得有话可说。那么，如何“有话好好说”，写出精彩的语句；如何“有话慢慢说”，注重语境的连贯，这就是我们要关注的重点了。赶紧动笔，写写下面这些话题吧。

1. Complaints wont make any difference. Id rather light a candle than complain about the darkness.

2. Telling the truth and making someone cry is better than telling a lie and making someone smile.

3. If we accept the reality of life and do what we would like to do without comparing ourselves with others， life becomes so beautiful.

4. Making money can give you a sense of achievement but only making a difference will give you a sense of fulfillment.