My Favourite Sports
2015-02-03
寇爱民 男,河北省衡水市阜城县古城中学一级教师、市优秀教师、县骨干英语教师,从事英语教学工作20余年,连续多年被评为优秀教师。在省、市级以上期刊上发表多篇论文。曾辅导多名学生在国家级、省级英语竞赛中获奖。
My Favourite Sports
My favourite sport is table-tennis. I like it very much. And Im very good it at①. I think its good for my health.
Zhang Jike is my favourite table-tennis player. Hes excellent and has great skills. After class everyday②, I go to play table-tennis with my friends. They all like table-tennis, too. I want to be a good table-tennis player with③ Zhang Jike. I also like to play badminton. And④ I cant do well in it. Lin Dan is my favourite badminton player. Hes very famous in the world. He won the first place in the 29th and 30th Olympic Games.
河北省阜城县古城中学九年级(3)班 韩旭
1. 优点:
本文语言流畅,表达清晰,用词准确。第一段概括了自己最喜爱的运动及其好处。第二、三段具体描述了自己是如何喜爱这种运动的。两个明星人物的出现无疑使文章锦上添花。全文结构严谨,层次分明,过渡自然。
2. 需要修改的地方:
① it at应改为at it。因为at是介词,宾语it要置于其后。
② everyday应改为every day。everyday是形容词,every day为表频度的状语。句中该部分应为句子的状语。
③ with应改为like。介词like,意为“像”。
④ And应改为But。but表示意思上的转折。
3. 评分:
按照中考英语作文满分20分的标准,本文修改前可得17分。