开放式短文写作Ⅰ

案例一

请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。

A man who fears suffering is already suffering from what he fears.

注意：

1. 无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；

2. 除诗歌外，文体不限；

3. 文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；

4. 词数为120左右。

写作思路和注意事项

首先要注意审题，把题目的意思看清楚。这个题目的意思是说“怕苦者正因为怕而苦”，因此我们不要害怕困难，要克服恐惧心理从而战胜困难。在第一段里，大家要开门见山，清楚明确地点题，然后用一个具体的事例来支持自己的观点。注意事例一定要和自己表达的中心思想紧密结合。并且事例要写出时间，事情的经过、发展和结果。最后一段归纳总结，呼应或升华文章中心。

范文

Such is human nature that we will be frightened when meeting with trials and tribulations， which turns out to be unnecessary in reality. It is not the hardships but the fear caused by those that makes us scared. If we can ignore the thought of fear or face it bravely， we will surely overcome the difficulties no matter how hard they are， as it did in the following case.

In the depth of my memory， I was not good at math in junior middle school. I always felt nervous before the math exam came. But the more scared I felt， the lower grades I had. Little by little， I realized that fear didnt help at all. So I tried to face it. Feeling fearless and calmer， I managed to be buried in my math study， thus making great progress in the last exam.

Based on the story above， I hold the view that we should work hard to improve the present situation but not to fear it. As a matter of fact， working hard is the most effective way to get over our fear.

点评

这篇文章审题准确无误，内容切题，应用的语法结构和词汇准确，句型多变，恰当地使用了语句间的连接成分，全文结构紧凑。

第一段思路很清晰，先用such引导的倒装句引出“害怕困难是人之常情”，用which引导的非限制性定语从句说明“在现实生活中没有必要害怕”，为什么呢？接着用一个强调句型强调“是我们所想的而不是困难本身让我们害怕”。最后提出自己的观点“如果我们不去想恐惧或能勇敢地面对它，我们就肯定能克服苦难。”后面文章还用as引导了一个非限制性定语从句承上启下，引出下面的例子。

第二段一开始用in the depth of my memory 这个介词短语导入事例：在初中由于害怕与紧张，自己的数学一直不好。这里the more...，the more... 结构用得很好，突出了害怕导致的不良后果“越害怕，考得就越差”，后来意识到害怕根本没用，就决定面对它并想办法克服它。little by little， so 这些词都使全文更连贯。最后一句话也写得很好，用动词ing形式作状语，后又用thus doing引导结果状语，使文章显得很紧凑。

第三段用based on结构承上启下，I hold the view that ... 引出自己的观点，最后用as a matter of fact 连接克服困难的办法。全文连贯，一气呵成。

案例二

请根据以下提示，结合具体事例，发表自己的见解。

Neither a wise man nor a brave man lies down on the tracks of history to wait for the train of the future to run over them.

注意：

1. 开头已给出，无需写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；

2. 除诗歌外，文体不限；

3. 内容必须结合生活中的一个事例；

4.文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称；

5. 词数为120左右。

写作思路和注意事项

这是美国第七位总统艾森豪威尔说过的一句话，意思是“聪明人和勇敢者都不会躺在历史的车轮前，等着未来的火车从他们身上压过”。那么我们到底该怎么写呢？这句话意思就是过去的已经过去，未来还没到，没有必要瞻前顾后。文章的开头要直接点题：我们要做的就是要把握住现在，从现在做起。事例可写因为沉浸在以前的荣耀中，一度生活得不愉快，经过调整，终于融入了现实生活。在结尾，对“忘掉过去，把握现在”这一主题再作呼吁。endprint

范文

As is illustrated from the above sentence， people tend to miss those days that have gone and expect the days that havent come. Actually， instead of missing what cant be seized， it is of greater significance to try our best to make full use of the present.

There was one time when I was lost in depression at the beginning of high school because it was hard for me to adjust to the new environment which was not what I had expected before. Therefore， I always missed the glorious days before and imagined what would happen in the future. Nevertheless， nothing has changed. What we can do， in fact， is to cherish the present and make good use of it. It was not until I realized it that I could adapt myself to the new life. Then I began to become part of the class， thus finding life was also enjoyable.

As Tagore says in his verse， if you shed tears when you miss the sun， you also miss the stars； that is to say yesterday is a history， tomorrow is a mystery， but today is a gift，which is why it is called present. So， we should seize and cherish our present！

点评

整篇文章思维缜密，条理清晰，结合高中生的生活实例给人很亲切的感觉。文章开头利用提示语点题：我们不能留恋过去，想着未来，重要的是把握好现在。第二自然段结合刚上高中时的经历，进一步印证前面的主题。结尾用泰戈尔的诗句“假如你为失去太阳而落泪，你也同样会失去群星”引出下文，并巧用present这一双关词结束并总结全文。

这篇文章的连贯性很好，首段使用了As is illustrated from the above sentence引出下文，中间段用There was one time when ... 举例说明，结尾用As Tagore says in his verse引出诗句。本文还用了actually， therefore， nevertheless， in fact， etc. 连贯全文。此外本文还使用了定语从句，宾语从句，强调句型等。

案例三

请根据以下提示，结合具体事例，发表自己的见解。

Life is like a heavy truck， so happiness and sorrow are like the two wheels. No cross， no crown. No pain， no joy. There are two different minds. One thinks happiness depends on material life； the other argues happiness lies in spiritual life. So what is the happiness in our life？

注意：

1. 开头已给出，无需写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；

2. 除诗歌外，文体不限；

3. 内容必须结合生活中的一个事例；

4.文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称；

5. 词数为120左右。

写作思路和注意事项

这篇英语提示的重点在最后一句话，幸福是什么？取决于物质方面还是精神方面？我们在写的时候最好在首段直接陈述自己的观点，然后再举例说明。

范文

Many people tend to link happiness to money， which is， in my opinion， a fairly wrong idea. There is no denying that money is of great importance in our daily life， but it doesnt mean that the more money you possess， the happier a life you will live. Therefore， happiness doesnt lie in substances but in our hearts.

In the book Three Days to see， Helen says when she has experienced the loss of the things taken for granted， she lives her life with more appreciation. Whether were rich or poor， healthy or disabled， as long as we live every day with appreciation， we can always see that life is full of surprise， warmth， and happiness.endprint

As far as I am concerned， it is the spiritual life rather than material basis that determines whether you will be happy. There is a limit to what money can do while spiritual wealth can bring you a sense of fulfillment and happiness. Love your own life and life will reward you with bright sunshine， gentle breeze and most importantly， pure and simple happiness.

点评

本文思路清晰，开头就陈述了自己的观点Therefore， happiness doesnt lie in substances but in our hearts. 第二段举了海伦凯勒的事例，陈述了她对幸福的理解。最后一段进行总结，发表自己的观点：it is the spiritual life rather than material basis that determines whether you will be happy.如果我们能尽情地享受生活，那么生活也会赋予我们丰厚的馈赠。

本文内容切题，语言表达准确、得体，句式丰富，恰当地使用了语句间的连接成分，表明作者具备了较强的语言运用能力。

【练习】

请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。

Perhaps you are always very confident， but do you have the patience to wait a little longer when youre in despair？

注意：

1. 开头已给出，无需写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；

2. 除诗歌外，文体不限；

3. 内容必须结合生活中的一个事例；

4. 文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称；

5. 词数为120左右。

请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。

We may not be able to do better than everyone else to be Number One， but we are able to improve ourselves all the time. Those who are always trying to improve themselves are the real heroes.

注意：

1. 开头已给出，无需写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；

2. 除诗歌外，文体不限；

3. 内容必须结合生活中的一个事例；

4.文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称；

5. 词数为120左右。

请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。

“I thank God for my handicaps， for， through them， I have found myself， my work， and my God.” —Helen Keller

注意：

1. 开头已给出，无需写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；

2. 除诗歌外，文体不限；

3. 内容必须结合生活中的一个事例；

4.文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称；

5. 词数为120左右。

请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。

Many things are important in our life， such as friendship， love， family， health， life（生命）， the environment we live in and so on. Sometimes， we never know what we have got until it is gone. We should learn to cherish.

注意：

1. 除诗歌外，文体不限；

2. 内容必须结合生活中的一个事例；

3. 文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称；

4. 词数为120左右。

5. 请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。

请你根据以下提示，结合你生活中的一件事，用英语写一篇短文。

Sharing is something that is learned as we progress through life. We share food and books. We even share knowledge and ideas. By sharing， we are helped or help people in need. By sharing， we contribute to society. By sharing we lead a meaningful life.

注意：

1. 无需写标题，不得照抄英语提示语。

2. 内容必须结合你生活中的一个事例。

3. 词数120字左右。

请你根据以下提示，结合你生活中的一件事，用英语写一篇短文。

Stress is a natural part of everyday life and there is no way to avoid it. How do you look at stress？ How do you handle pressure in your life？

结合事例说明，在面对压力时，你是如何调适的。

注意：

1. 无需写标题，不得照抄英语提示语。

2. 内容必须结合你生活中的一个事例。

3. 词数120字左右。endprint