Parents

姜经志

一、习作要求：

父母是孩子的启蒙者。如何与孩子相处，是父母要认真思考的一个问题；作为孩子，尤其要学会与父母和谐相处、经常沟通。在你的日常生活中，你是如何与父母相处的？请以Parents—My Best Friends为题，写一篇80词左右的短文。

二、学生习作：

Parents-My Best Friends

All the parents love their children. So do my parents. They are not only my parents but also my best friends in my life.

My parents are both teachers. They are always busy with their work at school all day. So they have little time to take care of me. I got a chance to learn doing① many kinds of things by myself when I was quite young， such like② dressing， riding a bike， reading and cooking.

Later my parents bought me a computer， and I used it to surf the Internet and study English. Once I played computer games for a whole day and forgot else everything③. I was still playing even when my father stood behind me for half an hour. He didnt punish me for what I did. Instead， he took a long walk with me in the evening and told me what I should do and what I should not do. From then on， I decided to put up④ the bad habit.

I love my parents though they have little time to be with me. We are getting on well with each other because we believe in each other and love each other.

（安徽省濉溪县百善中心学校九（1）班 王涛）

点评

许多父母由于和孩子的沟通不当，教育方法落后，导致和孩子关系紧张；还有一些孩子不懂父母的恩情，不懂得用出色的成绩去回报他们。本文的小作者通过讲述与父母之间发生的一件小事，告诉人们教育子女要讲究方法。只有平等地和孩子相处、作孩子的朋友，才能教育好孩子。本文语言流畅、叙述条理清楚、表达感情真挚，虽有一些语法错误，但仍不失为一篇佳作。

【修改之处】

① doing改为to do。learn 后应接动词不定式，即learn to do sth.，意为“学做某事”。

② like改为as。such as意为“例如”，用来列举事物。

③ else everything改为everything else。形容词修饰不定代词时，要把形容词放在不定代词的后面。

④ put up改为give up。“放弃”应用give up。

【评分档次】

按中考英语作文满分20分的标准，本文修改前可得18分。