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陈一鸣

As the saying goes, hobby is the best teacher. A hobby is a favourite pastime of a person. My hobby has been a part of my life; it is pop music.

From a child to a teenager, I started to listen to the pop music and care① about the stars like other students. At that time, I found the tunes are② very beautiful.

Day by day, I paid more attention to the words of a song than tunes. Some words are moving and others are romantic. And I am used to listening to the music when my mood are heavy. I can always put my heart into the music and get out of the busy life.

Now, I am also interested in singing songs. I want to use the most beautiful tunes to express my emotion.

To my joy, I can spend my teenage life with music. And I have to agree that hobbies can change ones life, because I have become a feeling girl.

指导教师点评：

文章按照时间顺序，结构清晰地把个人爱好表达清楚，语言优美。运用了许多重点句型和短语，堪称一篇佳作。不过其中也有一些语法错误：①care→cared and连接的两个谓语应该一致，都用过去时。②去掉are,直接用形容词作宾补。